May 26 2015

A Review of Succubus Duel by Amanda Knight

Succubus Duel by Amanda Knight

Succubus Duel by Amanda Knight

I understand why, sometimes, authors like to put a twist in a story. If that twist explains why things happened in the story, then that’s perfectly reasonable. Where I have a problem is when the twist is told in less than a paragraph, comes out of left field, and is not explained at all.

In doing so what was a story about the triumph of the heart, what seemed to end on a good and valid ending, gets wrecked and, at least for me, I feel cheated. A good story doesn’t need a single sentence to make it valid. It never really should.

  • Title: Succubus Duel
  • Author: Amanda Knight
  • Length: 43 Pages
  • Publishing Date: May 12, 2015
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The work tells the story of:

Paige is fighting for her husband’s soul as a Demonic Sex Demon appears before them and claims Conner’s life.

Can Paige submit herself to a mind game and win a duel between her and the powerful demon in a all-in sex contest.

But Paige has yet to realize who is the real monster…

Paige finds herself facing the succubus Evestriel who is bent on taking her husband Conner’s life. Learning all she can, she comes to conclusion there is one way to save him and she makes a deal with Evestriel. The battle begins, but the outcome is the question unanswered.

The work is, as a whole, very well written, the characters are strong, have their own stories and there’s some wonderful heat when the erotica appears. Billed as romance, there is a good deal of that appearing in the story as well. There’s so much to like about this work in so many ways, but then, the last two pages just take away all of the story and left me wondering.

Evestriel is the image of a succubus through the story. Sexually powerful, controlling, very strong willed, She has a purpose, intends to have what she wants and drives towards that. There is a hint of her true form from time to time, slightly stereotypical, but that’s not done in a way that takes away from her character.

Both Paige and Conner are fully fleshed out characters as well, there are quite a lot of foibles in each, they are in love, and it’s that love which Evestriel pushes against using lust and passion to try to overcome them. That battle, how it unfolds is an amazingly good story and I loved each and every moment because there was purpose to both sides of the battle, Conner being held between the two.

However, as I have said, it is the last two pages of the work that, for me, feel completely unnecessary. The reason as to why Evestriel was after Conner makes sense from her perspective and I can accept that reason as it stands in the work. The problem is that the reason is suddenly dropped into the midst of the work, is not shown more than in passing, and leaves a really bad taste for me in the story. It feels, in many ways, as if the author decided to throw the twist into the story for the sake of doing so. For me, it doesn’t work.

If it had been explained more, if the reason would have been told more than a split second of realization by Paige and then the story closes, I would have accepted that more. As it stands here, I just felt the journey was not worth the ending. Something better needs to be here to make this work what it should be.

I’ll give this work three out of five pitchforks.

If the ending would have been explained, drawn out, something more than the single page that it comes to, then I would have liked this a lot more. But I can’t really because the ending just felt like an afterthought once all of the good in the story was done.



May 25 2015

Another Nothing Monday…

There’s nothing today on the Tale once again. This does seem to be going on far too much of late, but sometimes real life just conspires to see to it that you just can’t think, or feel, the story that you’d like to tell.

The stories will return, in time, I’ll get there…



May 24 2015

A Review of The Devil in Me by Carl East

The Devil in Me by Carl East

The Devil in Me by Carl East

The author Carl East has written quite a number of works in which succubi appear or are main characters in the story. Some of these have been really wonderful stories that I did enjoy and recommend always. The stories tend to go in some unexpected directions which adds quite a lot to this author’s stories.

The question that this works brings is: What happens when you have been possessed and then freed? Is there a cost or a gift in the aftermath? The meaning is, always in the eye of the beholder of course.

The work tells the story of:

The exorcism that saved her life has Samantha coming to terms with what happened. Unable to remember the demonic possession, she’s told that there are others like her, and each has received a special gift or power as a result. When her power begins to manifest, she’s shocked to discover that it’s not what she expected. How she decides to use it, may be a gift or a curse, but there is no denying the pleasure it gives.

Samantha was possessed once, but is freed. Told there are others like her, and that they all have a power as a result, she wonders what that might be. It doesn’t take long for the power to reveal itself. Samantha has some of the powers of a succubus… and something more.

Overall Samantha isn’t a succubus, or at least physically one. She does however through her possession gain the power of controlling the lust, needs and wants of others. At first this is focused on one particular type of individual, but over time it’s clear that she can do more than that. She does not have horns or a tail or wings, but there is something about her that has changed and that makes the erotica go forwards from there.

Samantha becomes, when aroused, a futa, and with that change comes a change in her personality, becoming far more dominant for one, but also she seems to turn also a bit masculine in her mannerism, voice and inflection. The erotica that follows is a bit harsh, slightly over the top, and in the end didn’t quite live up to what I had hoped the story might offer. That’s not in that Samantha became a futa, it is that she’s a kind of succubus and that part of her isn’t explored as much as I would have liked to have seen.

Outside of the moments when Samantha is trying to figure things out, or having her way with various characters, the other moments fell a bit flat for me. The dialog is a but stiff, uninvolved and, on occasion, the other characters seem to be talking from rote and that bothered me. Other than Samantha herself, the other characters were cardboard in comparison and that hurt the story as a whole.

The story moves very quickly from the first encounter through a short explanation of what happened and then the erotica takes over from the story as much as it can. Interspersed are bits of story, of discovery, but they aren’t enough to carry things between the erotica. There’s more than enough erotica, there isn’t enough good story to tie it all together and that’s the real shame here.

I’ll give this work two and a half out of five pitchforks.

The beginning offers quite a lot to tell, but the rest of the story doesn’t quite deliver on that promise. There is heat, some futa erotica mixed with some mind control which works as a whole, but the story behind all of that is a bit thin and I wanted to see more.



May 24 2015

A Review of Night Waitress by Morgan Hawke

Night Waitress by Morgan Hawke

Night Waitress by Morgan Hawke

I find that, for me, when Succubi have the will to choose who they are intimate with they are more interesting characters. Connected with that is, of course, that they also have the ability to choose who they want to take for their needs.

That is not a duality, not by any means. It’s more of being aware that everyone has the right to make a choice. Some make better ones, some worse, but in the end it is their choice. How they get to that decision makes up the most interesting stories on their own.

The work tells the story of:

Lilli is a waitress in an all-night diner. Bruce is a dangerously attractive man that won’t take no for an answer, even if it’s for his own good. What’s a succubus to do?

Lilli is working, as usual, at her diner and expects the night to go as it usually does. However one patron takes an interest in her and despite Lili’s insistence that he leave her alone, he doesn’t. Taken away, Lilli is at his mercy, so he thinks. But then the truth about both of them comes out and the unexpected happens.

The fascinating thing about this work is the sheer power of Lilli’s personality and will. While it’s clear from the start that she is a succubus, wings and all that eventually appear, there’s more to her and when that is revealed it adds a new layer to all that had come before in the work. While she is a succubus, she tends to be a bit more on the vampiric side of things as a whole, fangs and blood being the main things to note here. As such I both like her and not so much so.

Her personality is very different from what one might expect, and with regards to the other character in the work, she gives him many warnings to leave her alone for his own good. It’s clear that Lilli would rather not have to do unpleasant things to him, but as much as she tries, eventually she has no choice but to follow Bruce’s lead.

There is a secret about Bruce which isn’t obvious at the beginning of the work, but as the story goes on it explains a lot about him, why he wanted Lilli and more. There’s quite a lot of conflict between him and Lilli over who’s in control of things, Bruce being very arrogant for the most part until the story turns towards the erotica.

The erotica is a bit on the rough side, having a touch of BDSM in the telling of that part of the story. There is heat in that, to a point, but it really depends on if you like rougher sexual encounters whether you would enjoy it or not.

The climax of the story is not exactly unexpected, considering how much Lilli warns Bruce, if in a roundabout way, that he was making a mistake. When the last few pages come, they hint at things not really delved into within the story and offers a glimpse of Lilli that didn’t really come out until the very end. I would have liked for the story to continue further, to tell more about Lilli, who she really is, and what her life turns into in the aftermath of Bruce’s actions.

Good characters, an interesting and unexpected story with many twists that keep one’s attention and turning the pages. A bit too much vampire for my personal taste and there are a lot of questions about Lilli that are left unanswered.

I’ll give this three and a half out of five pitchforks.

Bit too much vampire for my taste, but I really did like Lilli very much. While this was a short story and nothing more expected of it, I would have liked to see where things unfolded for Lilli from here.

It does leave one wondering…



May 23 2015

A lovely Morrigan Aensland Cosplay YouTube

It’s been a while since I’ve featured cosplayers on the Tale and really I need to do so more often. I did find a nice YouTube which shows the talents of many wonderful cosplayers which is what I’ll be sharing today.

And if you cannot see the video here, please try this link:

It’s very hard to pick just one cosplayer, they all put so very much into this and as such I really don’t want to pick just one to be “the best” as that isn’t fair.

So I won’t do that.

But I will, as I find them, be sharing much more cosplaying going forwards as there is so much talent and passion shown in what is created…

And isn’t that what Succubi are all about?



May 22 2015

A Review of Dentata by Layla Hart

Dentata by Layla Hart

Dentata by Layla Hart

One of the themes that comes up fairly often with stories about succubi is erotic horror. Personally I find it hard to enjoy those sorts of stories because at the point where the erotica heats up, or the succubus appears and looks to be someone interesting, the story takes a turn directly into horror and I just find whatever enjoyment I had to that point vanishes.

Usually that happens when the story doesn’t give a clue about what the theme is going to be. Sometimes the title tells you exactly what is going to happen and it really doesn’t add much to my enjoyment of the work.

  • Title: Dentata
  • Author: Layla Hart
  • Length: 18 Pages
  • ASIN: B00LS7M9OE
  • Publishing Date: July 13, 2014
  • This work at

The work tells the story of:

James, a self-proclaimed “seduction expert,” is in a foul mood after striking out with a hot girl at the club. His luck seems to turn around, however, when he runs into the sexy and mysterious Lucia just before closing time. He can’t believe how easy it is to convince Lucia to come home with him. Unfortunately, there’s a reason why she agreed so quickly, and James is about to learn that inviting her into his apartment will prove to be a costly mistake…

…because Lucia is a succubus who consumes predatory men. And she has a special punishment in mind for James, which may or may not include a brand new body and with a jagged, gnashing bonus between the legs.

James goes out looking for a one-night stand, and after being turned down by several women meets Lucia who agrees to a drink at his place. However, Lucia tuns out to be a succubus, one that seeks a measure of revenge on men like James and takes that on him, leaving him with a problem. One that he won’t ever be freed from.

There are a lot of stereotypes in this work from beginning to end. All of the men seem to be the worst they can be, all of the women seem to be much the same. Lucia is more of a monster than a seductress, and in the end when James’ fate is sealed, even that turns into exactly what you would expect from the beginning of the story.

Lucia does, for the shortest of moments, act at least somewhat seductive towards James, but as soon as possible she turns towards being a monster, doing her best to be a monster and then… she vanishes leaving James to his fate. Initially I liked Lucia just in her attitude more than anything else, but when her true self came out it was apparent the she really was a stereotypically evil and single-minded monster. She isn’t however stereotypical in how she deals with James in the story, though for those that read Hentai, I’m sure you have an idea how that part of the story goes.

When James comes out the other side, and discovers that he has been changed, altered, transformed, the story goes a bit into the stereotypical gender switch moments of self exploration before he. now she, makes a fateful choice which turns the story towards the more graphically horrible part of the story. When that moment arrives, and then passes rapidly, the story comes to a rather unsatisfying end and that, more than anything else, really hurts the story to that point.

The work managed to make what happens between James and Lucia erotic, even having some good heat in that part of the story. The aftermath when James discovers what she is now cursed with and must do, just pushes any seduction or heat away as quickly as possible to get to the horror and bring the story to a rushing conclusion.

The work is rather short as a whole in that the lead up to Lucia meeting James takes up a large portion of the work. What actually happens between them passes very quickly and it seemed like it was cheating a bit to make that part of the story, which is the core of it, to be so short. The same can be said about the ending which takes a very few pages to get through and come to the end. I think that as a whole the work needs about ten more pages of story and most of that needs to be in the aftermath of James discovering what happened to him.

The writing is very descriptive. I liked the voices of the characters and the beginning of the work showed a lot of promise towards what it could be. But whatever heat was built in the story didn’t really go anywhere for me, I didn’t really care about any of the characters and I should have.

I’m giving this work three out of five pitchforks.

While the writing was very good, and the characters were very strong, I just came to that point in the story when I cringed, sighed, and turned the pages. It shouldn’t have been like that for all of the promise that led up to the final moments of the work and I don’t think it needed to.



May 22 2015

A Review of Opus Covetas: Succubus Summons by Branford Hubbard

Opus Covetas: Succubus Summons by Branford Hubbard

Opus Covetas: Succubus Summons by Branford Hubbard

Dialog is one of the most difficult things to be able to write. If it is managed well, it ads a lot to a story and its characters. But a lot of the time there is something off, odd, or just wrong and it’s a jarring thing.

It’s more confusing when a character appears with one voice, a modern one, and then suddenly loses that voice to one of the distant past. That’s a bit of a hard thing to ignore when it happens. But it does.

Still, technology can fix almost anything…

It is the story of:

Virgil is an average college kid looking to shed his innocent demeanor – he’s tried everything humanly possible, his loneliness drives him to click on what he’s sure is a scam of a dating site, but can he be sure of that? Virgil soon learns that his idle investments in this site, and its mysterious ebook, the ‘Opus Covetas’ may not even be of this world!

Virgil resigns to rewatch one of his favorite movies with his two friends, but when the electricity goes out and he finds himself face to face with the girl he met online. There is something…supernatural about her, but he finds himself unable to resist her, even with his two friends in the room.

Virgil finds himself checking out a website about devil women and through this comes into contact with a particular book. And through that book he finds that some legends are, in fact, very real indeed.

As a whole I thought the overall story concept was interesting. Man finds website, is given an eBook that opens the door to a Succubus. She is drawn to him, of course, and then… the most obvious ending possible happens. There is a twist, but nonetheless, the ending was obvious so far in advance honestly.

Ishesistrinaw is the Succubus of this work, Virgil calling her Isis as he cannot manage to pronounce her name. She’s very much a Succubus with a single purpose in her thoughts and, of course, Virgil and his friends find themselves “doing” things with her. She has a heart-tipped tail, which I liked, and there is a hint of Morrigan Aensland in her appearance otherwise. But what’s most confusing about her is the language she uses.

Before Virgil actually comes to see her, she has a very modern style of speech. By that I mean the two of them text and chat several times and there’s all of the appearance of a person with a good grasp of modern language there. When she actually appears she doesn’t speak in that way. It’s very odd and stilted,  sounding very medieval in tone and character. And that’s a real problem. It’s hard to accept her real voice and that other voice as being the same being.

She is, as a whole, rather stereotypical in nature and the usual things happen to Virgil and the others she comes into contact with. I had problems with that mental image of her because her closing words in the story just didn’t seem to ring true. There was something missing… in the translation I think is the only way I can put this.

The work itself needs an editor to fix the oddness of the dialog, the halting interactions, and most of all, the single-minded turn the work takes for really no good reason that I could figure out. It began with a premise that I thought could turn into something really interesting and instead it just devolved into a sex scene which really didn’t do much for me.

Where the work ends leaves some thoughts behind to ponder. There’s a lot of problems left in the wake of Isis for one, and for the other, the questions about the site Virgil found and what exactly all of this means, including the book he downloaded, are just left as afterthoughts.

I just don’t think it needed to end on this point, nor do I think that the heat was as good as it should, or could, have been considering a Succubus was involved… But that’s me.

I’m giving this work two and a half out of five pitchforks.

Needs some editing, some focus, better dialog (read it out loud and you’ll see why it’s so weird) and a lot more heat than what is there. The promise is there, it just needs to find the way onto the page.