There are some stories that are aimless. By that I mean there’s a character, there’s a long telling about them and what they do, but it doesn’t really amount to much. Having a character seeking to discover themselves is one thing. Ending up in a sex scene that doesn’t go very far doesn’t make the story more. An idea not realized is one of the most difficult things to read.
Magic is powerful, it is something not to be toyed with. Words have meaning, they make things happen. There is always a cost, but it is that cost that can make the story mean something more. Turning that into something that has no emotion or power leaves nothing behind.
- Title: Incubus: A Visit From Hell
- Author: Marco Chambers
- Length: 9 Pages
- ASIN: B01KAGP5H6
- Publishing Date: August 11, 2016
- This work at Amazon.com
The work tells the story of:
Dan is a wizard. He’s sure of it. All he needs in order to prove it is to be able to do a single spell. But when he buys a special spellbook from a special fortune teller, it seems like his time to shine has finally come. However, the results are a lot more intense than he expected when he accidentally summons an incubus, a demon whose purpose is to mate with human women, and he has to assume the role of the female so that the demon can fulfill its purpose.
Dan believes he’s a wizard, but he’s never been able to create magic. A book calls to him, opened to a spell to summon an incubus, and it works. But the incubus needs something from him and Dan decides that the cost of the spell is worth paying.
The work is lacking in heat, story and plot, needing to be taken from a very lukewarm hot flash towards something which the story suggests, but never really gets to. Much of the work is spent with Dan in monologue, talking about himself, his past and what he believes he can do. Once the spells start, it’s a series of disappointments before he attempts to summon an incubus.
This works and an incubus, who is never named, appears. He’s actually interesting as he’s not stereotypical in his words or actions. He’s just different enough to make him interesting. But there’s little time spent in exploring that aspect before the story turns to a rather quick and unsatisfying piece of erotica. There’s really no heat, there’s nothing more than a very quick sex scene and then things come to a rapid close, the story ending on a ‘what-if’.
Being that the work is so short, the balance of plot and heat doesn’t come through, the exploration of Dan isn’t complete and otherwise the story holds not much in the way of being interesting. The author could have well doubled the length, told more about the incubus, brought more character to the characters and had something more than a very short hot flash.
Two out of five pitchforks.
The story really doesn’t go anywhere, there’s really not much of a plot or meaning. It’s a monologue, with little interesting happening. There’s an idea here, one that should be built upon, but as this stands I just didn’t find it interesting.