Aug 14 2015

A Review of Succubus by Joyce Melbourne

 Succubus by Joyce Melbourne

Succubus by Joyce Melbourne

The one thing I cannot enjoy is a work that takes a stereotypical view of the idea of Succubi and does nothing with them. Yes there can be some erotic moments, yes there can be some part of the Succubus that might be interesting. But the problem is when the story follows a path which as been well told before and really doesn’t take things in a new direction but rather ends the story on a note that simply wrecks any enjoyment that might have been.

Why it is that so many authors need to show Succubi as being nothing more than monstrous things when they can offer more than that if they just take a little risk and move away from the everyday into the extraordinary?

  • Title:  Succubus
  • Author:  Joyce Melbourne
  • Length: 12 Pages
  • Publishing Date: October 19, 2014
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The work is described as:

A woman is seduced by a succubus; a being in a female form, who drains her of both her sexual, and life energy.

Avery finds herself haunted by the touch of a woman in her dreams and as her dreams become her life, her life ebbs away piece by piece until only the touch is left and nothing more.

Avery seems, from the beginning of the story, a very interesting character and at the beginning that’s more than enough to hook me into the story. The problem is that when the succubus appears Avery becomes… less. She’s less intelligent, less focused, less alive as a whole. While much of that is the effect of the succubus upon her, it does take away so much of the character quirkiness that was present and replaces it with a dull personality for the most part of the story.

That’s a shame because I think the story would have been more interesting if Avery would have a clear mind and be able to, if not completely resist the call of the succubus, then at least be able to respond to the help she is offered by the one person in the story that she should have listened to. Instead she pushes them away.

As well, that action doesn’t feel right for the one she refuses as, considering the relationship they had, they should have done more than they did. They turned into an afterthought, almost a red herring in a way, and that just bothered me. Perhaps not all stories have to end on a positive note, but in this case I think that would have helped this story a lot considering where it ends.

The succubus is, save for her being interested in Avery, a fairly stereotypical succubus with but a single purpose in her thoughts as the story progresses. As the time that Avery spends with her goes on, the succubus turns from being something erotic into something more monstrous which climaxes at the end of the work as a scene that just took away anything and everything that had been accomplished in the story to that point. There was hints of something different, but it didn’t arrive. There was a moment when the story could have turned towards something more positive and hopeful, but it didn’t go that way.

The story is described as being erotica, but I really didn’t see a lot of heat. The story was confused at times, though that was a reflection of Avery’s own confusion. When there was some erotic passages between Avery and the succubus they were slightly glossed over and the heat was something that didn’t burn as hot as it could have. When the final scene came, I really didn’t see anything erotic there, as all it did was make me sigh in frustration as the story came to a close.

In short, I just didn’t find that I enjoyed this work as much as I wanted to. It was lacking focus, a great deal of heat, and the stereotypical actions of the succubus just didn’t do anything for me. Even when Avery had a slight clue about what was going on, instead of taking the story in that direction, it is tossed aside for a bit more time between the succubus and Avery, but not before Avery is chastised for asking a question that, to me, should have been answered if for no other reason than in the setting it was asked, it should have been.

I’ll give this work one and half pitchforks out of five.

Stereotypical succubi I just cannot find interesting at all. Erotica with pain and suffering doesn’t do much for me either. To have a story that offers such a good plot and characters come to the end that it does really doesn’t do the story justice and that’s the greatest shame of all…



Aug 14 2015

A Review of Succubus: Succubus by Olga Berg

Succubus: Succubus by Olga Berg

Succubus: Succubus by Olga Berg

There are few works about Succubi that tell things about them that hold me from the beginning. It especially matters when the Succubus herself might look like the legends, but is not what the legends tell them to be. They can be thankful, caring, offer something to another that changes their lives.

But that is, in many ways, only a small part of whom the Succubus is. Sometimes the horns hide the halo. Sometimes the tail points the way. Sometimes, just sometimes, someone understands all of this and then, something exceptional happens.

We all learn something.

  • Title: Succubus: Succubus
  • Author: Olga Berg
  • Length: 41 Pages
  • Publishing Date: July 26, 2015
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The work is described as:

A story about a monk who saves a succubus who then reveals the monk’s secret which changes his whole life…

Amadeo encounters a succubus who, he is told, has done evil. After some consideration, he meets with her, frees her, and then in return the succubus frees Amadeo from the past he did not know. His live changes, truths appear, but Amadeo never forgets Alma. Sometimes the truth sets you free, sometimes it just opens the door and you need to step though to find your own truth.

The work focuses upon Amadeo, his life, both past and present, and in doing so there is a mystery that unfolds which is quite telling for all of the characters involved. But none of this would have begun without Alma, the succubus of the work, having been captured, having a talk with Amadeo, and then, over time, revealing to him what his past was.

Alma has the classical appearance of a succubus, hooves, red skin, tail and horns and all, but that is where things change. She is not, at all, what one might expect a succubus to be. That in itself makes for some contemplative moments for Amadeo, but more so, there is a connection, an understanding that comes through their time together that means quite a lot more than seems to be at first. She is there in the beginning, is in his thoughts through discovering the truth, and in the last, she appears to answer a prayer, a telling one, by Amadeo.

I felt that the story gave Alma an angel-like aspect to her, one in which it is clear that her purpose is not to be evil, but rather to open the eyes of others to their fantasies, desires and most of all, the love within themselves. When Amadeo finally learns the most important truth about himself, the one that makes all things possible, that provides a ending to the work that feels right, closes the tale on a point of joy, and, most of all, provides a truth that matters.

This is not a work of erotica, far from it. This work tells a story in which one character makes the journey from being lost, without a past, to having that past known, finding his way, and discovering that, in many ways, two souls, once entwined, are for always.

As much as I loved the story, and how wonderful both Alma and Amadeo are, there are some minor problems as well. The main one being that there is a problem with tenses throughout the work, which some additional editing would have helped with. As well, the text reads a bit oddly in places, seeming slightly confused as to what the author was trying to express. The latter does cause some confusion in trying to understand the text, but considering the spoken dialog, that well could be a reflection upon the characters themselves in a way.

The work ends on a note which offers a satisfying note for the main characters, and at the same time leaves the suggestion that there could be something more at some point. The final truths spoken by Alma turn out to be quite thoughtful, open, and are the truth as she knows it to be. For some characters that is the answer to their prayers, for others it is the shaming of their own faults, fears and flaws.

A story with power, promise, love, devotion. But also with fear, disbelief, self-crimination and need. The telling point is the word of a monk and a succubus and what that means to them both.

Four out of five pitchforks.

I wish the writing had been a little more clear at points, certainly at least one more editing pass to correct the various tense errors as well. This is a wonderful, thoughtful and, for me, compelling story. I hope there is an “after” to be told, but if not, what is here tells something wonderful…



Aug 13 2015

Succubi Image of the Week 395

A rather purplish Succubus for this week’s image of the Succubi. I think that the most interesting thing about Succubi is all of the different looks they have. No two look exactly the same nor should they. Their personality, their seductiveness and more, must be there and clearly so. In doing so, the artists that draw Succubi bring them to life from imagination… And imagination is where the Succubi play…

Sugar by VonVoski

Sugar by VonVoski


This work is titled Sugar and is by an artist on DeviantArt called VonVoski. You can find the original page on DeviantArt with this art here and this artist’s page on DeviantArt is here.

She simply is a gorgeous looking Succubus, I love her looks, expression, her hair is wonderful and I like that her tail and horns also match the rest of her appearance. The contrast between her pale skin and her purple makes her stand out more I think overall too.

The thing that works best is the shape of her face, the look in her eye, the little pouting tease on her lips. There’s a lot of character in this and I adore that in art most of all. She’s quite seductive, doesn’t have horns that look wrong or a tail that clashes with the rest of her as well.

I like the outfit, how it is both sexy, but not over the top so and as well it teases her form, shape, and leaves a bit of a hint of things to be discovered about her. Naming her Sugar, I think was inspired as well as really I can’t think of a better name for her…

She is, quite simply, a sweet Succubus after all…



Aug 12 2015

More of an Octoberfest Devil than a Halloween one

Wicked Devil CostumeHalloween obviously arrives in October, but there is another important event that happens to also appear in the month of October and it has a lot to do with drinking and buxom girls carrying beer. Perhaps I have found the right costume for a Devil Girl to appear there, but not one of the Succubi by far…

This is called the Wicked Devil Costume and it comes with the dress and horns and nothing else. The pitchfork, stockings and shoes come separately. The costume alone lists for $40 and the rest of the ensemble would rise that to just shy of $100.

I have to say that as something for Halloween it really doesn’t do much for me. However as something for a bit of an Octoberfest surprise I think that the entire look does make the grade for that at least.

The pitchfork however is nothing special, the horns are so-so but do work, just slightly, as part of this costume’s overall look. I think what really makes the entire look work here are the stockings, but then the problem is that they are not part of the basic costume.

It does have a certain cuteness to it, and I am reminded a lot, as I have mentioned, about Octoberfest. But would I consider it?

I can’t really say it would be one of my first picks, there are several other costumes that look much better, have more of a look to them than this does. Still, that doesn’t mean that it is completely wasted… It’s more of a question of how to use it rather than lose it…

Two pitchforks out of five.

Slightly better, but we all know that next week will be back to the disasters again…




Aug 11 2015

A Review of Succubus Huntress: A Rogue Werewolf by Julie Law

Succubus Huntress: A Rogue Werewolf by Julie Law

Succubus Huntress: A Rogue Werewolf by Julie Law

It takes very little for a story to go from hot, interesting and compelling to begin much, much less than that. The characters can be wonderful, the story involved, the erotica well done. The succubus herself can be interesting, have a story to tell, and be all that a succubus should be. But then having the editing, or the lack of it, or the mistakes in it, completely ruin things.

A review of a new series, one in which the main character is a succubus. One with a strong will, strong powers, and within that a little bit of darkness that gives her an edge. It is stories like these that give some of the best reads… but why is it that they cannot have editing to match the promise?

  • Title: Succubus Huntress: A Rogue Werewolf
  • Author: Julie Law
  • Length: 70 Pages
  • ASIN: B0106N093S
  • Publishing Date: June 21, 2015
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The work tells the story of:

Selene Kostas was a huntress – one of the High Council’s operatives responsible for keeping the world of the supernatural protected, be it from discovery by Humanity at large or from the criminals that plagued their society.

It wasn’t an easy life and being a succubus on top of it only made things worse.

Most didn’t trust her, fearing her and her powers. She could make them her slaves, dominate their minds and souls, and only her willpower let her resist the temptation to make it happen.

It was a struggle she fought every day of her life and only her work took her mind out of it.

Now a new case had appeared, but what seemed simple at first was anything but. Catching an out-of-control werewolf in the woodlands of the United States might prove more dangerous than she expected and if Selene isn’t careful her desires can make her bite more than she can chew off.

Selene is a Huntress, one of the best in what she does. She deals with that part of the supernatural world that gets out of hand, out of control and needs to be dealt with. A rogue werewolf chase turns out to be something more dangerous, and deadly, than she expected. But then, Selene is a Succubus, and she isn’t without her own powers… and needs.

I like the concept of this work, the characters are very strong, both the major ones, like Selene, and the lesser ones as well. There’s some wonderful world building, there are relationships, history, and all of the things that I like to find.

Selene is a wonderful Succubus character, she has an amazing force of will, personality and listening to her speak about her own abilities is a fascinating read. There’s some hints of how powerful she is, what she is capable of. There’s a bit of Succubus mind control in the story, there’s a bit of action-adventure too.

Selene’s life is touched on in a way where it’s clear her being a Succubus, in the role she is in, leaves her in situations that can be complex, but also, sometimes, very simple when her own needs, to “fulfill her inner demon” come out. She doesn’t have horns or a tail, but otherwise, she is seductive, even if she is dealing with some really bad characters along the way.

There is a twist in the story, which comes rather quickly and, once past that, the story turns more romantic than action for the most part, but at times there is a mix of both along the way. Eventually a resolution to the story comes, in a way, before it closes on, if not a cliffhanger exactly, then a foreshadowing of what might come next in the series.

There is a problem however, and that comes to the editing. There are a huge number of tense mistakes in the writing, in almost every single page, that completely destroys any heat in the erotica, any drive in the action, any suspense in the mystery. This should not have happened considering how much effort was put into the plot, the characters and then overall work itself.

When the writing has mistakes like this within it… It is a real problem:

“Succubus were like that – we craved power and the powerful, and we made them crave us.”

This is a problem. When it keeps repeating, when the main thing I remember about the work isn’t the story so much as the number of editing mistakes within it, that isn’t right. If all of these mistakes weren’t there, this would be an amazing work by far. I see a lot of promise in what’s happens, where the story seems to be going, and what might come next.

I want to see that from this series. I want to see a story where I don’t have to stop and try to figure out what the author is trying to say before continuing onwards. I want the passion, the heat, all of the story that is here, but without the flaws that cause so many problems. Strong characters, a good plot, a universe that has a lot of promise to give. But the editing leaves a lot to be desired.

I’ll give this work two out of five pitchforks.

I don’t want to rate this work so low, but the editing mistakes just forced me to drop this from what should have been a three and a half, possibly a four pitchfork review.

I will be looking for the next work in the series, with luck. I hope in that case the author will have edited that work better than this one was. It takes a lot of effort to write a story, it takes as much to edit it.

Both are vital and cannot exist alone.



Aug 11 2015

A Review of Taken by the Incubus and His Tentacles by June Harper

Taken by the Incubus and His Tentacles by June Harper

Taken by the Incubus and His Tentacles by June Harper

I wonder sometimes if it is too much to ask that writers have someone edit their stories before they publish them. I mean, you write something and then what makes you not have things checked? Is it because you wrote an erotica work? You don’t have anyone you could trust to read your work and edit? Maybe it’s the thought of just getting your story out so that you can make a little money on it?

Whatever the reason and why ever this happens, with the advent of self-publishing this is really starting to become a problem… Seriously.

  • Title: Taken by the Incubus and His Tentacles
  • Author: June Harper
  • Length: 23 Pages
  • ASIN: B00MG31OXQ
  • Publishing Date: August 4, 2014
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The work is described as:

A midnight intruder…

Ava is on the right track for life: The summer before her senior year in college she lands the internship of her dreams! It’s perfect, from the hot location in the city to her inspirational new boss. On the plane ride over, however, she meets an eccentric old woman who gives her a necklace with some interesting properties.

One night, Ava drops the necklace and shatters it, releasing the mysterious substance within. After that, some strange things start happening, from gusts of wind that knock her off her feet to slimy, wet tentacles that come from the darkness and violate her every hole and crevice! Ava is terrified, but has nowhere to go. Should she flee her NYC apartment for the safety of her hometown in Texas? Or should she stick it out and tolerate the nightly invasions for the sake of her dream job?

Ava travels to New York to her dream job for the summer, along the way meeting an old woman who gives her a necklace. Ava breaks it and then something odd begins to happen.

As a whole the summary suggests that the oddities, the incubus, is central to the story and that much of the work focuses on that. But that isn’t true in this case. There is substantially more time spent on Ava’s travel, finding her apartment, meeting her boss, and they spending time together than with the incubus of the title of the book. In truth it isn’t even clear if he is an incubus, there really aren’t any clear signs that he is, and as such that is a bit disappointing. His name is never revealed either for that matter.

There really isn’t all that much in the way of erotica in this work, really there is one short scene the didn’t do anything for me at all. It had some incubus-like qualities, but overall what happens just didn’t have much heat in it. The scene plays out in the last five or so pages of the work and at the very end it simply comes to an abrupt stop, the incubus vanishes and the story comes to a close.

As a whole the work would make for a good opening chapter, or really the basis of three chapters, of a longer work, but in this case, how the story plays out just seemed to be a series of loosely connected scenes that eventually ended with a very short hot flash piece. The thing is that the buildup to the incubus appearing really set the stage for a story, one that has two characters with their own quirks and they are described really well. But going from “ordinary” to “something weird is going on” happens so abruptly that it feels out of place with the rest of the work.

I think that drawing out things, playing on the sense of something being off, eventually leading towards the incubus appearing after Ava had been teased or dreamed of things would have been more interesting and the final encounter would have worked better. As it is, the incubus just isn’t interesting enough when compared to Ava and the other main character, or really any of the minor ones.

I’ll give this work two out of five pitchforks.

All kinds of story being told, and really if it was the beginning of a novel it would hook you into the story well. But in this case, it takes up the vast majority of the story really leaving only a very short passage for the erotica that is quick, blunt, and really didn’t have all that much heat in it.



Aug 10 2015

Talk by TeraS

Something that means something to me…


By TeraS


She sits by the window, watching him outside. She sits in shadow, a mug in her hands, tracing the rim with a finger. She things about things, how they are, why they are.

She sees him outside, in the light, sitting by their dog, looking off into the distance, one hand patting slowly. She wonders what he is thinking about, what she might have done wrong, what guilt he is placing upon himself.

She turns those thoughts back upon herself, thinking about what she has done wrong, putting the guilt upon herself. A sigh, looking into her tea, wishing that she could read the tea leaves and find an answer in them.

She looks up, seeing him still outside, now resting his chin on his knees, their dog now looking at him. Wiping tears away, she walks to their kitchen, putting her mug into the sink, leaning against the countertop and thinking.

There should be happiness, there should be smiles. There should be more than what she must do, what he must as well. She still feels him inside of her, always. But she knows that wane smile, he knows her own. She knows nothing has changed inside of them, their love is just as strong as ever. Their lives haven’t changed, she knows this. But other things have.

She hears the front door open, he coming inside. She doesn’t move from the counter, looking out the small window there to the house next door. She listens to their dog’s paws clicking on the kitchen floor, then stopping beside her.

He comes close, standing there beside her. She wants to say something, but doesn’t know where to start. She hears the rustling of his hand in their dog’s cookie box, then the sound of their dog munching beside her.

Out of the corner of her eye, she sees him resting his hands on the counter with her. He isn’t looking out the window, he’s looking at the counter. She wants to say something, to try to understand why things are as they are. He starts to say something, but doesn’t quite manage to do so.

Closing her eyes, she rests her head upon his shoulder, then feels his cheek touch against her own. Behind them both, their dog lays there, watching them both.

It doesn’t matter who says the first word, only that the words are spoken, because they need to be.

“Talk to me. Please?”

And so they do, tears and all…