Aug 11 2015

A Review of Taken by the Incubus and His Tentacles by June Harper

Taken by the Incubus and His Tentacles by June Harper

Taken by the Incubus and His Tentacles by June Harper

I wonder sometimes if it is too much to ask that writers have someone edit their stories before they publish them. I mean, you write something and then what makes you not have things checked? Is it because you wrote an erotica work? You don’t have anyone you could trust to read your work and edit? Maybe it’s the thought of just getting your story out so that you can make a little money on it?

Whatever the reason and why ever this happens, with the advent of self-publishing this is really starting to become a problem… Seriously.

  • Title: Taken by the Incubus and His Tentacles
  • Author: June Harper
  • Length: 23 Pages
  • ASIN: B00MG31OXQ
  • Publishing Date: August 4, 2014
  • This work at Amazon.com

 

The work is described as:

A midnight intruder…

Ava is on the right track for life: The summer before her senior year in college she lands the internship of her dreams! It’s perfect, from the hot location in the city to her inspirational new boss. On the plane ride over, however, she meets an eccentric old woman who gives her a necklace with some interesting properties.

One night, Ava drops the necklace and shatters it, releasing the mysterious substance within. After that, some strange things start happening, from gusts of wind that knock her off her feet to slimy, wet tentacles that come from the darkness and violate her every hole and crevice! Ava is terrified, but has nowhere to go. Should she flee her NYC apartment for the safety of her hometown in Texas? Or should she stick it out and tolerate the nightly invasions for the sake of her dream job?

Ava travels to New York to her dream job for the summer, along the way meeting an old woman who gives her a necklace. Ava breaks it and then something odd begins to happen.

As a whole the summary suggests that the oddities, the incubus, is central to the story and that much of the work focuses on that. But that isn’t true in this case. There is substantially more time spent on Ava’s travel, finding her apartment, meeting her boss, and they spending time together than with the incubus of the title of the book. In truth it isn’t even clear if he is an incubus, there really aren’t any clear signs that he is, and as such that is a bit disappointing. His name is never revealed either for that matter.

There really isn’t all that much in the way of erotica in this work, really there is one short scene the didn’t do anything for me at all. It had some incubus-like qualities, but overall what happens just didn’t have much heat in it. The scene plays out in the last five or so pages of the work and at the very end it simply comes to an abrupt stop, the incubus vanishes and the story comes to a close.

As a whole the work would make for a good opening chapter, or really the basis of three chapters, of a longer work, but in this case, how the story plays out just seemed to be a series of loosely connected scenes that eventually ended with a very short hot flash piece. The thing is that the buildup to the incubus appearing really set the stage for a story, one that has two characters with their own quirks and they are described really well. But going from “ordinary” to “something weird is going on” happens so abruptly that it feels out of place with the rest of the work.

I think that drawing out things, playing on the sense of something being off, eventually leading towards the incubus appearing after Ava had been teased or dreamed of things would have been more interesting and the final encounter would have worked better. As it is, the incubus just isn’t interesting enough when compared to Ava and the other main character, or really any of the minor ones.

I’ll give this work two out of five pitchforks.

All kinds of story being told, and really if it was the beginning of a novel it would hook you into the story well. But in this case, it takes up the vast majority of the story really leaving only a very short passage for the erotica that is quick, blunt, and really didn’t have all that much heat in it.

 

Tera

Aug 10 2015

Talk by TeraS

Something that means something to me…

 

Talk
By TeraS

 

She sits by the window, watching him outside. She sits in shadow, a mug in her hands, tracing the rim with a finger. She things about things, how they are, why they are.

She sees him outside, in the light, sitting by their dog, looking off into the distance, one hand patting slowly. She wonders what he is thinking about, what she might have done wrong, what guilt he is placing upon himself.

She turns those thoughts back upon herself, thinking about what she has done wrong, putting the guilt upon herself. A sigh, looking into her tea, wishing that she could read the tea leaves and find an answer in them.

She looks up, seeing him still outside, now resting his chin on his knees, their dog now looking at him. Wiping tears away, she walks to their kitchen, putting her mug into the sink, leaning against the countertop and thinking.

There should be happiness, there should be smiles. There should be more than what she must do, what he must as well. She still feels him inside of her, always. But she knows that wane smile, he knows her own. She knows nothing has changed inside of them, their love is just as strong as ever. Their lives haven’t changed, she knows this. But other things have.

She hears the front door open, he coming inside. She doesn’t move from the counter, looking out the small window there to the house next door. She listens to their dog’s paws clicking on the kitchen floor, then stopping beside her.

He comes close, standing there beside her. She wants to say something, but doesn’t know where to start. She hears the rustling of his hand in their dog’s cookie box, then the sound of their dog munching beside her.

Out of the corner of her eye, she sees him resting his hands on the counter with her. He isn’t looking out the window, he’s looking at the counter. She wants to say something, to try to understand why things are as they are. He starts to say something, but doesn’t quite manage to do so.

Closing her eyes, she rests her head upon his shoulder, then feels his cheek touch against her own. Behind them both, their dog lays there, watching them both.

It doesn’t matter who says the first word, only that the words are spoken, because they need to be.

“Talk to me. Please?”

And so they do, tears and all…

Aug 09 2015

A Review of the The Futanari Succubus Series by Lady Vixen and Mister Vixen

The Futanari Succubus Anthology by Lady Vixen and Mister Vixen

The Futanari Succubus Anthology by Lady Vixen and Mister Vixen

A review of a series today which was originally published as a series of four works and then collected into a single volume. Rather than listing all of the works on their own, this review will look at the series as a whole.

There are tales that Succubi are being of evil, unrepentant. But some see them as they truly are, the givers of wonder, passion, and, sometimes, the ones that make dreams come true. There is a difference between legend and truth. Truth reveals all.

  • Title: The Futanari Succubus Anthology
  • Author: Lady Vixen and Mister Vixen
  • Length: 139 Pages
  • ASIN: B00U3WXWT6
  • Publishing Date: February 27, 2015
  • This work at Amazon.com

The anthology collects the following works in the series:

The full Futanari Succubus series, in one anthology:

  • Futanari Succubus, Part One: Mahalath: Abby’s dreams have been taken over. She’s not exactly sure who it is, but every night she has the same dream: the same dream about her. The dreams are intensely sexual in nature, always leaving Abby with a burning sexual desire in their wake. And now, after tonight’s dream, Abby wakes up with a resolution: to find out who (and what) is causing her to have these dreams.
  • Futanari Succubus, Part Two: Naamah: Each night it’s the same for Joan. She dreams of being strapped to a pyre as a malicious succubus confronts her, and has sex with her as the flames consume them both. Joan does her best to struggle against these encounters, but finds her desire to continue them too great to deny. One night, the succubus makes a mistake, though. It tells Joan its name. Armed with that information, Joan is ready to make her stand. Joan will summon Naamah into the real world, and force her to come before she does. In doing so, Joan will hold power over Naamah, and be able to banish her from ever appearing to another person again. At least, that’s the plan…
  • Futanari Succubus, Part Three: Agrat bat Mahlat: Anahita is an angel living in the Realm of Light. But a chance encounter with a succubus, Agrat bat Mahlat, makes her question everything she’s ever known. One night of uninhibited passion ignites a burning desire to break free of her bounds and become free to do as she pleases with the succubus. Will Anahita be held back by her community, or will she break free and join Agrat for a life of passion and desire?
  • Futanari Succubus, Part Four: Lilith: Maria is a shy, reserved girl who has just begun college. But when she starts having feelings for her roommate, Bel, things spiral out of hand until a succubus named Lilith shows up and promises to open her eyes to a whole new world of sexual release. Will Maria reject the succubus’ advances, or will Lilith prove to be too powerful of a temptation to overcome…

The series focuses each of the stories around one of the original succubi of myth and legend, so there is a work for Mahalath, Naamah, Agrat bat Mahlat and Lilith herself. In each work the stories are similar, in that each of the succubi does not act like the myths and legends suggest they do, what their focus is, and what they desire. But they are slightly different in that each of the succubi has their own personality, their own focus, and when they come into contact with the ones that summon them, call for them. are involved with them, or wishes for them, that is when the story turns into something really quite special.

Each of the works tends to follow a similar path in which the main character of the work is conflicted over someone, they dream of one of the succubi, and then find a means to have them appear. They are taught a lesson about love, faith, desire, or simply being, which is mixed with some wonderful heat before the story comes to a close, with the ending left open to what comes afterwards.

Mixed into the erotica is a bit of futa, but it isn’t heavy handed or seems out of place as the stories continue onwards. There is a good deal of the powers of each of the succubi shown, how they are each different, and what each does to “reward” the ones they are with. It’s that turning of the story, not being at all stereotypical in any way really, that makes the works captivating. There’s a sense of wonder, of exploration, of discovering within each character, succubi and otherwise, that they hold within themselves something precious and vital to themselves and others.

There’s a powerful sense of hope in each work. There is no sense of evil, no touch of horror, of needing to be crude or brash. There is a lovely heat, some romance, some moments unexpected, but in the end what comes out of each story is a sense of having one’s soul settled. To be sure of what is wanted and needed in each case.

There is some conflict, make no mistake. There are some situations in which the main characters have to make a choice, and it is not an easy one to make. Being that it isn’t that each character seems to know that they are making a choice that will matter, deeply, it raises the storytelling to a better place and makes this more. The series is about story more than the erotica and those are the stories I enjoy the most.

If there was one thing missing for me, it was that as much time was spent telling about the main characters, their thoughts and experiences, the same cannot be said about the succubi. There are some hints about them, the occasional comment or suggestion, but save for one short passage there isn’t a lot told about themselves. I would have liked more of that, to see them outside of their encounters and learn how different they are to the myths about them.

Well written, telling characters, a series of stories which have purpose and more. A wonderful read and a series that I did enjoy fully…

I’ll give this series as a whole four out of five pitchforks.

While each of the individual works is wonderful, tells of the author’s writing ability, of making characters be true to themselves, their needs, wants and desires, as a collection there needs to be more connections between the works I feel.

I would like to know more about the succubi themselves than what is shown. We see them being a force for change, both physical and sexual as well as spiritual. What isn’t shown is who they are beyond that which each encounter shows.

I would have liked to know more about all of the succubi in more intimate ways than simply how they seduce, teach, guide and give to others. That’s a part of this story that didn’t come out and still tugs at my thoughts about these works.

Perhaps there is more to tell than what has been. It would be nice to think so…

 

Tera

Aug 09 2015

A Review of Heartbreaker: Part Two by Guava

Heartbreaker: Part Two by Guava

Heartbreaker: Part Two by Guava

The next work in a series that I reviewed earlier this year about a rather dominant succubus named Cherry. You can find the first review here on the Tale where I noted some issues I had with the work and some of my thoughts about it.

I hoped there would be a part two, and in that part I wanted to see the promise that Cherry showed come out fully and the author take advantage of her personality, powers, and character most of all. I was rather pleased when came to the end of part two…

  • Title: Heartbreaker: Part Two
  • Author:  Guava
  • Length: 14 Pages
  • ASIN: B00OMFFC98
  • Publishing Date: October 17, 2014
  • This work at Amazon.com

 

The story continues the tale of:

Cherry, the beautiful young succubus, has taken an unsuspecting man captive. The more she teases him without release, the greater her supernatural power grows, and the more helpless he becomes against her.

Cherry has her prey at her mercy and does everything to control him, stoke his fires, and, with some luck, give her not just the feeding she needs but the sex she craves. But sometimes the choices made aren’t always the best ones when you go a little too far.

Thankfully this work is much better than the first was. Cherry is a more focused character, there’s more of her personality, power and needs shown that I thought added to her more than they did in the first work. Her dominance over Kevin, her prey, is very clear and she uses that power to bring him over and over again to the edge, but never allows him past that point. It is a bit cruel at times, but there is a powerful heat in the words of his and her reactions to what happens through most of the story.

The work is a bit more than a hot flash, there are some hot mind control moments that work really well and Cherry’s succubus powers come out in the story really well, their description is told in a way that adds a lot of heat to an already heated series of erotic scenes. There is one moment, and really I found it telling when it happened, when Cherry is asked a question and for the one and only time in the work she doesn’t quite know how to respond or what to say. In that moment there was a hint of, let’s call it humanity, in her and that made me like her a lot more than I did before.

While the erotica is amazing, and the story of Cherry controlling Kevin, bending him to her will, and making him do really anything and everything to make her orgasm and more, there’s a point in the story that I just felt was out of place. In all of the teasing and drawing out of Kevin’s need… Cherry goes out shopping. This just took a lot of the heat from the story away and, as far as I was concerned, didn’t add anything to the main plot at all. It did set up I am sure another another story about Cherry, but it just caused a break in the story that took a while to overcome when she returned to Kevin.

The ended also left something to be desired as well in that how the work ends is abrupt, sudden, and almost seemed half thought out. This might well be in order to allow Kevin’s story to continue, but really it didn’t quite work for me and I could think of several other ways it could have ended that were better than it did.

There is a bit a suspension of reality needed when reading this work in what happens to Kevin in that some of the things that he is forced to go through by Cherry are… not exactly what you might call “possible.” Hand-waving that they happen because of Cherry’s powers is one thing, and that does work to a point, but it’s a bit over the top. Not in a bad way, it’s very hot as I have said, but a little less “wild” and a bit more “dominance” might have read better as a whole.

A very hot flash of erotica, the author has improved quite a lot from the first work about Cherry and especially in that there aren’t any real errors in the story itself. By taking more care in this work I think the author is creating a very good series about a succubus that interests me and I will be looking for book three when it comes out.

Four pitchforks out of five.

Much better overall in many ways. Better writing, hotter erotica, some well thought-out mind control aspects to the story that I enjoyed very much. I expect there will be a part three to Cherry’s story and in that, I think, there might be some problems coming in her direction. I think that will a very interesting story to read…

 

Tera

Aug 08 2015

A bit of Succubus art on YouTube

Back to some lovely Succubus art on YouTube today on the Tale… I think this particular Succubus is rather interesting and certainly she is eye catching as well…

And if the YouTube does not play on the Tale, please try this link:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=djya7ADHUzg

And, as always, an image of the completed art, in case YouTube removes the video:

Succubus by Soul Fisher

Succubus by Soul Fisher

This art is the work of an artist on YouTube called Soul Fisher and I think it is a mix of two opposing things about Succubi. The first is that they are, obviously, sexual beings, but the other is the question of what they are to the one viewing them.

The most interesting part of that latter question for me in this art is that her wings seem to be almost angel-like in quality and, as a whole, that’s something that doesn’t appear often with Succubi…

She does make me wonder about her name, her past, and what it is that she is smiling about exactly… A story to wonder about sometime I suppose…

 

Tera

Aug 07 2015

A Review of the Darkfallen series by Leona D. Reish

Darkfallen: Taking Jacob by Leona D. Reish

Darkfallen: Taking Jacob by Leona D. Reish

A review today of a series of works by the author Leona D. Reish which are interconnected by a succubus character who is, in a lot of ways, quite interesting, unique, and displays some powers that, for a succubus, are not expected. With all of that, the stories turn in unexpected directions, ideas, and developments that I found quite unique…

The wants within oneself are the gateways for others to use as they see fit. But at the same time, if those wants lead to transformations, then the gateway is but a passage to what becomes oneself anew…

It is the story of:

hilst the world works to forget what happened to the underground prison island of Sarandin Isle, it’s demonic host remains. Whilst tales are set in motion beyond its reach, the inhabitants of the depths do not stand idle. From Warden to opportunist thief and simple explorer, many find themselves fall prey to its grasp and drawn down, beyond where the light shines.

The series has several main characters who are the focus of the works, each encountering in their own way the succubus called Kynthia. For each of those that come into contact with her, she plays upon their deepest unspoken desires, ensnaring them into her web, and then transforming them in ways that reflect upon what they wish to be, have, or succumb to.

The series runs through quite a number of various themes, succubus mind control and domination for one, slime, futa, gender transformations, expansion, mind control, and with each overall theme Kynthia is in control of what happens. She’s more involved in some of the stories, but appears in all of them to taunt, tease, suggest and, on occasion, direct what happens.

Kynthia herself is a bit of a mystery in that there’s not a lot told about who she is, what she wants, and so on. It is made clear that she enjoys transforming others, really it is the core of her personality, but beyond that there’s more focus spent on those around Kynthia than herself. Of all of the works, really the first and fourth had more of Kynthia involved with things, the middle works she’s there, but in passing really, not actually being more than a narrator in a way.

The transformations, both physically and mentally that the characters undergo are well written and when there is erotica involved with that, the heat does not overcome the story itself and I liked that quite a lot. There isn’t a sudden change, or a snap of fingers and all is done. There’s a process which is told, experienced and felt for each character.

The work does, on occasion, run a bit towards some slightly over the top moments, bordering on being a little too much and breaking the overall mood of the works, but, thankfully, doesn’t quite go over the line and holds onto the plot and characters throughout. There is a good deal of character development in each work, the universe of the series grows with each and that I found to be refreshing. The works do need to be read in order, really the first and fourth are intimately connected with the middle two works bringing in new characters along the way.

The series tells a strong story, Kynthia makes the series move through the twists, turns, transformations and submissions of the characters quite well. There’s lots of detail, well told and each work builds upon the previous one, which, for me, is important because the actions of the past have consequences and they return often.

The only part that bothers me a bit is that Kynthia herself doesn’t really change through the series. Her personality, her mood, the way she acts, doesn’t change over the course of the series. She seems to be a constant, never changing, save for in the first work where she takes something from Jacob which stays with her through the series. I didn’t feel that bode well for her character and I wanted to see her change, even if only a little. Being static over all that she does in the series didn’t quite work for me. I’m not expecting her to change who she is, because really she’s quite the evil thing so far as succubi go. But I’d like to see more of her “plans” than her “doing” from time to time.

I’ll give the series as a whole four out of five pitchforks.

As this is an ongoing series, I expect there will be more works in the series to come and that Kynthia will be at the centre of things making everyone dance to her tune. I think with all that the author has developed in this universe, how strong the characters are and the force that Kynthia is within the works, there is still more stories to tell here.

Perhaps, at some point,Kynthia herself might learn something as well as that I think would be the most interesting thing of all…

 

Tera

Aug 07 2015

A Review of Star of My Heart written by K T Fair

Star of My Heart written by K T Fair

Star of My Heart written by K T Fair

A review of the first work in a series that I think has a very interesting premise to who the Succubus of the series sees herself as and what she has decided that matters to her. She’s intelligent, she has a soul… in a way… and most importantly, she gives a darn about others. But something in this particular work bothers me a lot.

Some subject matter makes me cringe, and honestly in some cases that isn’t because of the story, or the characters, it’s about the question of my personal comfort zone and in this case, regrettably for the rest of the work I really liked, that took quite a lot of that away…

  • Title: Star of My Heart
  • Author: K T Fair
  • Length: 34 Pages
  • ASIN: B00MNQGORC
  • Publishing Date: August 11, 2014
  • This work at Amazon.com

 

The work is described as:

My name is Jezebel, but I’m not your typical succubus.

Oh, I am a demon who seduces men in order to drain their life away. I’m also immortal, gorgeous, and amazing fun at parties — at least until the end. I’m all of those things, but I also have something that no other succubus has.

A conscience.

And let me tell you, in my line of work, that’s not an added benefit.

Jezebel is a Succubus that has been around for a very long time. But as time has gone on she’s discovered that taking the souls of the innocent haunts her and in ways that she can never forget or forgive herself for. But there are those in the world that are dark, evil, and their actions make taking their souls a lot easier… even if some of them just deserve to die.

I like Jezebel very much… She has a few quirks mind you. Some I like, she has no hooves and notes that she prefers things that way, and she has a tail that is a bit too dangerous a thing to be playing with when a Succubus gets a bit horny. She has the most interesting personality and as the story is told from her perceptions, that gives a lot of moments where that personality really comes out and tells a lot about her. She isn’t, not really, evil, and that made her a lot more interesting to me in that she made a choice and she abides by it. She is tempted, on occasion, to break the promise she made to herself, but her will is strong and that made her such an interesting Succubus in my thoughts.

Through the course of the story the life that she leads, the single friend that she has, matters to her and in that friend there’s something important for her in that relationship. When she is forced into doing something to look after that friend, to protect her, that changes things and that story is one that needs to be told in the next part of the series I hope.

She does find some dark souls that she can take and not feel guilty about, but in one case, and it makes up the core of this story and reflects on the title as well, it’s a subject that I found hard to read about, even though it was fiction. What she was forced to do, and what happens through that action just made me very uncomfortable and while I understand that is was important to the story and fits in with her decisions of the past, I just didn’t like the last part of the work as much as I did the rest.

There really isn’t very much erotica in this work and for the most part I don’t think it hurts the work but rather improves it very much. It also gives more of a chance for Jezebel’s story to be told and that made the work a more solid piece of writing. The story is told well, there is meaning to the words and I really did feel for her when the story was over. But, and I regret this, her decision to become someone else in order to have revenge, or justice, depending on your point of view, just was very creepy and unsettling.

The ending is a slight cliffhanger, and it obviously leads into the next work in the series which I really want to read. I just hope that where Jezebel is at the end of this work isn’t where she is for too long in the next one. Her character and drive is better than that and there are so many plots left to be explored. Those are the things that I want to see unfold and I think they will.

I’ll give this work three and a half pitchforks out of five.

I like Jezebel, I like her a lot. But the story turns in a direction that I really was uncomfortable with. I hope the next part of her story gets away from where it ended really quickly because if it stays there too long I don’t think I’ll be able to continue.

 

Tera

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