Jul 07 2015

A Review of Taken by Her Mechanic by Tori Kiss

Taken by Her Mechanic by Tori Kiss

Taken by Her Mechanic by Tori Kiss

Some time ago I reviewed a work by an author that I thought had quite a lot of promise. It told the story of a Succubus encountering her one unexpectedly. You can find that review on the Tale here. Imagine my surprise when a work with a similar title, published under a different author’s name, appeared. Could it be the same story? Could it possibly? The answer to that question is, very much, yes.

Could I hope that the author had improved the story? Added to it? Done something more than they had in the original work?

The answer to that question is… sort of.

  • Title: Taken by Her Mechanic
  • Author: Tori Kiss
  • Length: 15 Pages
  • ASIN: B00C6QF0RO
  • Publishing Date: April 3, 2013
  • This work at Amazon.com

 

The work tells of:

She’s a succubus who needs her fix. Only a man can fill her with the power she needs.

She finds him. He’s a mechanic. Or… is he something more? This succubus is about to find out.

 

When reading this version of the original story, there isn’t any changes to the plot, the characters or anything substantial. I will note that the author did edit a lot of the errors in spelling and grammar that I noticed, which does improve the story.

As I noted in my original review, there is story to be savoured, there are two characters that play off each other so very well that the attraction between them is perfectly written. The situation is a little forced at the beginning, but once the faltering start is past then the real story and the heat arrive.

Agjalel, the Succubus of this story, amazingly enough, has a tail. It’s not exactly what I expected it to be, but I did find it a rather unique take on the Succubi. I also thought that the mythos around her was well done and I wanted to know more about Lovers and the world they live in. While that was what caught me and held me in the story, it also was how perfectly Succubus-like Agjalel acted, what she discovered about herself and then Vincent added much more to that pleasure.

We really don’t learn a lot about Vincent, and to me that’s a shame because so many ideas, hints, and suggestions about who and what he is appear in the work. When the climax of the story comes, for both of them, what could have happened, and I expected the ending to be a sad one for all that was hinted at, thankfully did not. But the ending came too soon.

The writing is wonderful, emotional, and draws you into the story. I found myself wanting the hopes of Agjalel about Vincent to be true, But it wasn’t only that. What really made this story work for me is that there is the connection between the two, the choice that Agjalel must make, and what that really means. But then the story ends and… and I was left wanting for more. Regretfully that never came from this author, only this reissue of the story and that, honestly, is a sad thing.

I’ll give this work four out of five pitchforks.

There is more to tell about Agjalel and Vincent. A lot more. It is a shame that promise, that heat, ends where it does.

 

Tera

Jul 07 2015

A Review of Begone, Demon Conjured by Unnatural Lusts! by Tasha Starr

Begone, Demon Conjured by Unnatural Lusts! by Tasha Starr

Begone, Demon Conjured by Unnatural Lusts! by Tasha Starr

An incubus-themed work for review this time on the Tale. Sometimes I wonder about the book summaries that authors create. On occasion they aren’t exactly… correct. By that I mean one reads the summary, expects one thing as a result, but then something completely different unfolds.

That’s not always a bad thing, sometimes it makes the ending more surprising, better, acceptable. But then comes the question of why exactly the work is so short and ends on a cliffhanger when it easily could have continued onwards, if only a bit further, for some truths to be revealed?

  • Title: Begone, Demon Conjured by Unnatural Lusts!
  • Author: Tasha Starr
  • Length: 12 Pages
  • ASIN: B00XWW3D84
  • Publishing Date: May 18, 2015
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells the story of:

A creature intent on ravishing me in the night stalks my house and arouses my passions. I remain unsure whether experiencing him will be the end of me or the beginning of ecstasy. The demonic Incubus himself has a secret plan as well. Why has he not yet forced himself on me, as is in his power? I search for answers, even as I futilely attempt to resist the allure of this creature of the night. What will I have to undertake to finally find resolution–and release!

Haunted by a demon, the reasons way not known, a woman tries to find answers and when she does, makes a fateful decision. In doing so, the incubus finds himself both summoned and trapped and she taken and held. But which is which?

The work is written in the first person, which does work, if feeling a bit out of sorts at times. That’s more in how the main character, who is never named, deals with the events she is in the midst of, but also in how so much of her thoughts and plans are half-hidden away. During the story, she is told that she is being visited by an incubus and of its plans, but really her reaction simply happens and there’s no real sense to that in the moment. As the story unfolds, eventually coming to the conclusion, her actions, and admissions, just didn’t quite fit with the rest of what she did, felt, and thought.

The incubus isn’t named as well, and remains as much as mystery as the main character herself. He speaks little, hides himself, and when he does appear, there isn’t much in the way of a connection between him and the main character. There’s just something odd about him, and even when why, and what, he intends to do is known in the story, it doesn’t really make a difference overall.

There is very little erotica in this work, mainly at the end, and a bit of an interlude at the beginning. There is a story, and really, when the twist comes at the end, I found myself sighing a little and wondering why the author ended the work where they did. The final page, what it reveals about the incubus and the main character, sets up quite an interesting story to take forwards from that point.

I can see many possibilities here, some of which I think could be really delicious if used. But with this being such a short work, there needs to be more development, more meaning to be found going forwards. There’s a mystery here, in a lot of ways, that is just touched upon, but isn’t really taken anywhere. I really wish it had been, that the work was at least twice as long as it is, and that more time was spent to learn about the characters and who they are.

There is really very little dialogue, this mainly being monologue more than anything else. When words are spoken, they are a little bit… odd. Speaking some of that out loud the words don’t come out as being smooth or “right”. There’s an oddity in them.

As the basis, or outline, of a longer work, this has promise, but as a story, even a short one, if needs to be more than it is. The framework is there, there is story to be told. There are two characters which can be interesting, but don’t come out fully before the climax comes, in more than one way, and the work comes to a close.

I’ll give this work three out of five pitchforks.

There is something here, it simply didn’t come out to play.

 

Tera

Jul 06 2015

Meaning By TeraS

It’s been a week for me, mostly suffering from this simply amazing cold that has afflicted me. The worst part being that I haven’t had the time to gather my thoughts, to manage something, to have an idea in my mind that I want to write something about.

Now I know, really, that there will be better times ahead, when I will be able to think clearly, to write the things that want to be. Perhaps even once in a while I might even find that little bit of sexy inside that seems to be adrift sometimes.

I think that, more than anything else, is what bothers me. It’s feeling like I have … misplaced … something. I haven’t lost it; I have moments where I have some really lovely and delicious thoughts. My heart reminds me that my ability to write something, anything really, is a moment where there goodness can grow from the words, from the story, from the ideas within, goodness that can add up to something.

So, while this is short, perhaps we can all find some …

 

Meaning
By TeraS

 

There is a place where, quite simply, no one ever goes … well, almost no one.

That isn’t because it is off limits, out of reach, or even simply guarded so that one couldn’t enter. No, the reason, quite simply, is that there is but one of the Realm that knows about it, but one who knows how to get there, and but one who takes the time needed.

Oh, she could just will herself there, arriving there in an instant, but that isn’t something she has ever really considered doing.

Her travels begin at her front door, where she makes sure to hug her Eternal before she leaves. Not because she will not return; it simply is because that is their way, and it was the thing she did when she first found the place. She walks through the Realm, seeing the comings and goings, occasionally pausing to chat with those around her, because that is part of who she is: she always has the time for others more than herself.

Eventually, she comes to the edge of the forests to the north and looks upwards. There, far off in the distance, are the mountains that mark the edge of the Realm, the clouds enveloping the tops, hiding them from view. They seem so far away, days upon days of travel.

As she did that first time she looked at them, she wonders what is up there, what she could see from there, and, after some reflection, she takes that first step on the path that leads in the direction she wishes to go. Time passes—how much matters little—and she keeps on, stopping here and there to look at the life around her, marvel, and be thankful for all that is there to be seen.

At some point—and even to this very day, she isn’t exactly sure how it happens—the mountains come into view as the path opens up in front of her, the canopy of the forest giving way to the sight of the sheer rock walls of the mountains, the seeming barrier to her and her intentions. Coming to the base of the mountains she remembers how, that first time, she had stared at them, almost willing them to give into her, but of course they didn’t. She remembers what her mother had told her, so long ago, that nothing worth doing is easy.

And it wasn’t.

She could have given up, many times, on her journey. But that thought never occurred to her. She was then, and always, quite the stubborn Queen and, if the world wouldn’t cooperate, then she simply would have to make do.

And so she did.

The sun was setting and the footing was becoming quite dangerous when she finally paused there, somewhere up in the mountains, close to the edge of the clouds, but not quite being there. It was frustrating of course, being so close to her goal and yet so far from it. She found a place to rest, upon a small outcropping, and dangled her legs into space as she looked upward into the clouds. She looked at them for the longest time, wondering what was above, what she might see if she would continue on, to see what the clouds held away from her eyes.

But then, she looked towards her home and Realm. From where she was, she could see everything and everyone there, the flickering lights of the streets, homes, and more. At least, at the time, she thought that it was lights. But she knew better now.

It took some time for her to realize just what she was looking at.

It wasn’t the Realm, the streets, the buildings.

It was the Realm, those she loved, and those that loved her in return.

That was when she realized that what was above her, the “What if …”, wasn’t as important as that which she had, knew, and cherished always. With a smile, she turned back then, making her way back home.

She had returned to that same place many times since then. But each time she brought a piece of the Realm with her: a flower once, a small photograph another time, bits and pieces of the world that she cherished, those she loved. Little by little, she was making a little place there, high above, where she shared this special part of herself, and of her world, with them.

After each time she visited, looked upon the Realm, and felt inside what mattered the most, she left the spot behind, left all of the memories there, to be held among the unyielding stone of the mountains in a place that no one else would ever really know. But, in the times between her visits, it wasn’t quite the same place that she knew. She had taken a small part of herself there, yes, a small part of her family there, a small part of those she loved there, little bits and pieces that meant the world to her. These bits and pieces, however, were really just icons—pieces that pointed to what Tera loved. In the midst of the twilight of the evening, the spirits held in that place took form, looking out over the place they called home as well; but they were different without her love there.

Tera never really understood why it was that there seemed to be light showing her the way down, the way home, the way to where everyone she loved was waiting for her to return. The meaning of the light she saw in all that mattered to her was that her light had shined, given, and lit the way. It was simply her own light begin returned to her.

And in that comes the meaning of one life and one soul, one who brings meaning to so much more …

Jul 05 2015

A Review of The Price of Changing by Abigail Pierce

The Price of Changing by Abigail Pierce

The Price of Changing by Abigail Pierce

One of the themes that is booming more popular of late is to combine Succubi and Incubi with other, wider fetishes. Notably among these are stories where a character is, or is transformed, into a futa or some description.

Overall this usually leads to a work that has a lot of sex it in, not much in the way of story, and when that happens I really don’t care for stories like that much. However, sometimes there is a single line of text which catches my attention and I wonder if the story will do something with it. And then there are times when I wonder what was the point of the Incubus being in the story in the first place?

  • Title: The Price of Changing
  • Author: Abigail Pierce
  • Length: 16 Pages
  • ASIN: B010W8KH84
  • Publishing Date: July 2, 2015
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells the story of:

Erica always wanted a cock. So when an Incubus offers to give her one, of course she accepts!

However, there is a price to be paid, if she wants the cock to remain permanently: she needs to fuck both a man and a woman with her new cock.

Her new dick is irresistible, though, so it is easier than she thought.

Erica has always had one dream. An incubus appears, gives her what she wants, and then puts her on a quest to keep it. Erica finds her dream, as reality, is everything she wanted and more.

Overall this work is primarily one about futas, transformation, a bit of mind control and a series of short hot flashes. There really isn’t a lot of story, the work almost immediately dives into erotica, though it does break things up with a little bit of story here and there.

There is an incubus to be found, making a couple of appearances, but overall he is a means to Erica’s transformation and putting her on a quest. Beyond that, there is not all that much known about him, least of which is his name. However, and this is the part that I found interesting, he does note that succubi and incubi, at least in this universe, do not take souls and I did like that part of his character.

But there wasn’t really much else about him to be told. His entire appearance in the work comes to perhaps two pages, if that. So I’m not sure what the point was for him to be in the work, save for bringing the story into focus. After that, the incubus isn’t part of the story again until a very short appearance at the end.

The rest of the work is Erica learning what her new abilities are, using them on two people in her office, and enjoying that. The erotica itself is a bit bland at times, I did like the mind control aspect, but overall it was just two very quick encounters that ended about as quickly as they started.

The writing is a little plain, it certainly needs an editing for the mistakes that cropped up in it. For example calling a character “miss Rye” instead of “Miss Rye” for one. There are some spelling mistakes, the dialog is very odd and stilted at times and it just made for a very difficult to read piece of erotica.

The work is more erotica than story, and it needed to have more of a balance overall. It is short, which is a problem, but even so the questions sit there by the end of the story unanswered. The main one being… why? Why did the incubus do this? What does he get out of it and why Erica?

The ending itself was disappointing in that it was a bit rote, a little expected, and as such that didn’t sit right with me. There’s a story in this somewhere, but it didn’t come out as much as the characters did.

I’ll give this two pitchforks out of five.

Not an incubus story, not really, the futa is a bit expected and with the writing not carrying the work, that makes for a difficult read with little heat to enjoy.

 

Tera

Jul 05 2015

A Review of Witch Lover by Eden Redd

Witch Lover by Eden Redd

Witch Lover by Eden Redd

There are some aspects of the Succubus legend that aren’t really made the focus of many works about them. The rather significant part of the legend says that Succubi mate with men in order to take from them what they need to create new Succubi and Incubi in women elsewhere.

Taking that legend, and putting a new twist into it made for a story that I rather liked a lot. Save for one small, little thing… The Succubus herself should have been more than a hint, a mystery, and a bit more involved in the story more than she was.

  • Title: Witch Lover
  • Author: Eden Redd
  • Length: 25 Pages
  • ASIN: B00NZGCKS6
  • Publishing Date: September 26, 2014
  • This work at Amazon.com

 

This work tells the story of:

Eva Morgan is a witch trying to hone her craft. She exiled herself from civilization to devote to her studies. She has spent nearly a year away from all human contact as she studied the dark arts in peace and quiet.

All that changed when she received an urgent call from a childhood friend. Daniel races to her remote location. He has a mysterious bite and wild urges plaguing his every thought. Daniel knows that Eva is the only one he can trust to help him.

Eva breaks her exile to sets about to help her long time friend. But during the process, old feelings bubble to the surface. Eva wonders if she can keep her true feelings aside from the stricken Daniel. As the clock ticks, Eva must decide if she will keep her feelings to herself or expose them to her long time friend who is fighting a monstrous lustful poison in his veins.

Eva is learning to be a witch, a rather powerful one, and in order to do so she has isolated herself from her family, friends, and all that she knew. Daniel calls, asking for help, and Eva cannot turn away from him. She discovers that a Succubus has her hooks in Daniel, and Eva knows exactly why that is. The question is, does she give the Succubus what she wants, and in doing so, do Eva and Daniel possess what they both need?

Eva is a fascinating story on her own. The story of her past, how she learned to be a witch, what she has grown into, all of that makes for captivating reading and I enjoyed that. I liked the strength of her character, her will, and when things come to the moment where she must make a decision, her single-mindedness in that. She is a very strong character and that served to make her narration of the story, as it is told mainly from her point of view, really well done.

Daniel is almost as good a character in that his emotions are there in the open, he appreciates Eva for who she is and is not afraid of what she is. But it is a little difficult at times to separate the real Daniel from the Daniel possessed by a Succubus. After the resolution of the story arrives, it’s very clear what Daniel’s personality is, and the connections between himself and Eva are just beautiful and I loved them dearly.

The Succubus herself is, for the most part, not seen in this work, though her effect on both Daniel and Eva are very clearly told. It’s a bit difficult to see what she wants as the story begins, but when Eva finds the answers, it makes a lot of sense and I liked where that led the story to. But the main problem for me was that through most of the story the Succubus is never seen, she is never given a name, and she just… isn’t there really. At the very end of the work she does appear, black horns and tail, which made me smile, and that was a mental picture that I rather enjoyed thinking about.

The thing is, that moment passes quickly, she vanishes once more and then the story comes to a close. With all of the build up, the story telling, the moments of passion and erotica that come before the ending, it felt a bit… rushed. It wasn’t that the conclusion of the story didn’t work, it did and well. It was that the story left me wanting to know what happens next, both for Eva and Daniel, but also for the Succubus herself.

I felt like there could have been a lot more told in this story, perhaps from the perspective of the Succubus herself that would have added depth to the story. Perhaps in the space between the climax and the conclusion there could have been time spent with her, she telling about why she chose Daniel, her fears and hopes, and perhaps more about her kind in this universe. That would have been very interesting I think.

The work is written very well, lovely characters, scenes, moments and passions. The erotica isn’t over the top or silly in nature, which for how the story is told, what it means to both Eva and Daniel, makes that very important. Enjoyed very much and, in a way, spoke to me quite deeply in what the succubus desired most of all and her reactions at the end of the story.

I’ll give this work four out of five pitchforks.

I loved the story, the building of tension and then the erotic release that comes with the climax of the story. The ending was wonderfully told and with it came a tease that begged to be explored further. But the Succubus herself isn’t, her is an adjunct to the main story and that bothered me somewhat. I’d like a story about her, what her world is like, for just the glimpse was enough to set my imagination racing and wondering.

 

Tera

Jul 04 2015

Steampunk Morrigan Aensland is an interesting idea…

I do like different looks for Morrigan Aensland. I think she can just about fit into any sort of look or situation and still keep her personality vibrant in doing so. One thing I have never seen, until now, was Morrigan in a steampunk sort of setting…

And I think this really works amazingly well…

Steampunk Morrigan Aensland by AriaDeVida

Steampunk Morrigan Aensland by AriaDeVida

This work is called Steampunk Morrigan Aensland and is by an artist on etsy.com called AriaDeVida. You can find this work of art here on that site, but I don’t expect it to be there any longer when this art appears on the Tale.

The reason for that is there was but a single copy of this art available and I am quite sure that someone has added it to their collection of Morrigan art by now.

I really would have liked to see the entire outfit that Morrigan would be wearing as the little snippet shown in this art really is quite the tease. I love the goggles, such a wonderful stylish touch by far. The lace top and chocker feel like they just would be something that Morrigan would wear regardless as they just fit her look and style quite well.

Really one of the best “what if” looks for Morrigan that I have seen this year and I really do adore it…

 

Tera

Jul 03 2015

A Review of Succubimbo by Skye Maze

Succubimbo by Skye Maze

Succubimbo by Skye Maze

There are, I have to admit, some ideas which make me wince a bit. I really have never quite liked the idea of mixing bimbos and Succubi together, mainly because it just doesn’t quite fit my own view of Succubi.

However, that doesn’t mean that an author can’t write something that might be more than I expect it to be. Today’s review is of the sixth work in an ongoing series, but according to the author it can be read as a stand alone work. The title, I will admit made me wince a bit, and I didn’t expect much really from the work as a whole… But I could be surprised… It’s a shame that I really wasn’t.

  • Title: Succubimbo
  • Author: Skye Maze
  • Length: 28 Pages
  • ASIN: B010R2AKWS
  • Publishing Date: June 30, 2015
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells the story of:

Having escaped from the clutches of six demon mistresses, Kai returns to save his friends. Used up and dominated in the dungeon, his Coven witches have lost all hope – but when Kai reveals the huge secret in his pocket, their infernal captors will do anything for a taste. Before they know it, these sexy succubi might be submitting in ways they never thought they would – or could.

There is a hidden trap which catches succubi unaware, and Kai has the means to use the trap and gain his freedom. If that means taking some succubi as his playthings, then that is what he will have to do.

The author made the note that this work could be read as a stand alone story and I have to say that really it can’t be. There is story preceding this work that I think would have made a difference for how the work read. but it isn’t in this work. The main focus in this work is the submission of a group of succubi, focused on how that unfolds and what happens through it all.

There are a few relatively hot parts in the work, but overall there was too much BDSM in play and they didn’t do much for me. While I know the characters are supposed to be otherworldly and so on, I kept wincing at the abuse being throw around that was trying to be erotic and it just didn’t work for me.

The work becomes more confusing when one succubi after the next has their name changed… and it is the same name. While I understand that is due to the spell they are under, and it is core to how the story unfolds, it just became irritating. While the main character does given them slightly different names, it doesn’t quite work in the end and needing to read the descriptions of each of the succubi to figure out which was being talked about bothered me.

There really isn’t much plot to speak of, the work drives directly into the erotica, and in doing so that makes the suggestion of this being a stand alone story a bit hard to accept. There’s no real explanation to why things are happening as they are, who the characters are, and how they all wound up in the situation they find themselves in.

There was a summary of the preceding works in the series at the end and that filled in a lot of the blanks, but that shouldn’t have been needed. Taking a few more pages to bring the story up to speed would have been nice. Having more story would have been as well.

I can’t say that I really liked the work, even if there was some good mind control erotica at a few points, even if there was one scene where there was some hot succubus erotica. The main problem I had was all of the focus on the over the top BDSM themes that, for me, pushed all of the heat out of the story.

As well, the title of the work gives a certain expectation to what the story will have as a theme. Now, I will admit that I was looking for a succubus who was a bit of a bimbo, acted like one and so on. That didn’t happen in this work at all. Yes, there is a lot of demand for bimbo themed stories and I am sure that an author could tell a good one with a succubus who was a bit of an airhead, but this wasn’t it.

The work is a hot flash, not having a lot else within it and I’m not sure if I want to go back and read the preceding works in the series or follow it forwards. I don’t like abuse all that much, and some of the scenes were pushing the envelope for me. Some will enjoy this work, I just couldn’t find my way into the heat past the suffering.

Two out of five pitchforks.

Better to read the proceeding works and know where the story came from and where it is going than to just take this story on its own merits. Not enough heat to sustain the work and not enough story to make it more than the flash it is.

 

Tera

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