May 31 2015

A Review of the Evil Sorceress In Training series by C.V. Walter

Evil Sorceress In Training: In The Tower by C.V. Walter

Evil Sorceress In Training: In The Tower by C.V. Walter

Amazon’s keyword search has a lot of problems really. It’s not hard to ‘game’ the system, to make a book appear in a keyword search for the most vague reasons possible. In the case of this series, a succubus appears in one book, for one short scene and then never appears again, nor is mentioned, or for that matter has any bearing on the story save for a means to transition in and out of a sex scene,

Now this happens in the second work of a five part series and, having some hope that the succubus might appear again, I read through the entire series. As such, this review will be talking about the series as a whole, the appearance of the succubus in particular, and the thoughts I had about the collection overall.

The work tells the story of:

Ari can feel the magic gathering for a ritual in the tower and it’s turning her on. When she gets there, she finds Dylan, Issy’s companion and some time lover.

Eager to help, Ari enters the circle that’s being prepared and creates her own deal with the creature being summoned.

When the sorcerer discovers her interference, she’s forced to join Dylan in the circle. Will she keep what innocence she has left? Will she still be a perfect sacrifice?

The series follows what happens to Ari as she comes to realize that she has the powers of a sorceress, learns about them, and the makes plans of her own. Along with those plans, Ari gets herself into a variety of situations, problems, and, in every case, as the events unfold, Ari has as much fun as she can with as many beings as possible.

As the series unfolds, Ari turns out to be quite a schemer, making all kinds of deals and working towards her ultimate plan, as she sees it. The thing is, the plot of the series gets a bit overrun by the number of sexual encounters and it takes away much of the interest I had in it.

I’ll note that there is but one appearance of a succubus in the series, that particular work is noted at the beginning of this review. The succubus is never named, only appears for the sake of having sex with another of the main characters, and then, after Ari is involved in things, has some fun with her as well. Once that encounter is over, the succubus vanishes in a puff of smoke, never to return, to be spoken of, or thought of again.

The way the succubus appears feels a bit like a backhanded compliment in way, she being described as looking like any other beautiful woman save for her horns and hooves. The succubus also really doesn’t have much of a personality, really caring only to have her way with the morsel she is offered to seal a deal. Which brings up the other problem here. The sorcerer summons the succubus to complete a deal and that’s confusing as the sorcerer made a deal with another being before. So is this summoning about that or something else? Even after the succubus gets what she wants, the deal made is never explained, referenced, or explained. it quite literally disappears into a puff of smoke.

The individual stories didn’t connect together well for me, there were gaps that never were explained, plots left dangling, and in the end, when it arrives, the ending is far too quick and unsatisfying for how much was put into the series. To take five books to tell a story, even short ones, and then end things on a whim just didn’t work for me.

There is some story and plot to be found, but it’s fleeting. The focus is mostly on the sexual encounters over the story, to write a series of hot flashes and connect them together as best as possible. I think the series would have worked better with some more time spent on the story to balance things out against the erotica. In doing so I think I would have cared more about Ari and the other characters, been concerned when their lives were at risk. But that didn’t happen here.

The idea of a series following the adventures of a “evil sorceress” is interesting and given more time to write a stronger series I think that would work well. But better plot, connecting events together and having a overall plot are needed here.

I’ll give the series as a whole two and a half out of five pitchforks.

A bit thin on story, some lack of heat in the hot flashes, and characters that just didn’t connect. Some editing might help, but more focus would by far.



May 30 2015

A Short Film – Succubus

I found an interesting short film the other day that is about Succubi, It’s described as: “A movie about a Succubus chasing you in your dreams. This short movie is a mix between stop motion and video sequences using a 10 mm fish eye lens.”

It has a very striking look and tells its story in a rather unique way I thought. There are a few points where there is a bit of a “scream surprise” moment happening, which I am sure will be obvious when it happens.

And if you cannot see the film here on the Tale, please try this link:

The film’s dream scenes do have the right sort of temporal disconnect and oddity that dreams tend to have which works very well. There’s also an undercurrent of danger, perhaps more evil, that becomes more and more prevalent as the film goes on.

With all of that, the actress playing the role of the Succubus does have a rather disturbing quality when she appears, especially when she moves very close to the screen and the full effects of the lens come into play.

The film does tend to step a bit more into shock horror than I personally like, but as a whole it’s a rather unique take on the Succubus myth that I wanted to share…



May 29 2015

A Review of Succubus Rising by Camdra Abott

Succubus Rising by Camdra Abott

Succubus Rising by Camdra Abott

The start of another series for review today on the Tale. I find it difficult to read something where the story is written such that the reader is placed in the role of the main character. The problem I have is accepting what that characters does and being made to accept that it was reasonable for them to do so.

If there is reason, explanation, consideration, then it is possible to accept them doing some very questionable things. When there isn’t, and the story doesn’t seem to flow well, or make sense at times, then there is a problem that needs to be addressed.

  • Title: Succubus Rising
  • Author: Camdra Abott
  • Length: 64 Pages
  • Format: eBook
  • ASIN: B00WCIZ51M
  • Publishing Date: April 18, 2015
  • This work at

The work tells the story of:

A young mage becomes embroiled in a fight for survival in a world turned hostile. Making a pact with a succubus and gathering a small group of survivors he fights and fucks his way through the remains of his world.

As a whole, the summary of this work that the main character ‘fucks their way’ through the story is completely accurate. There is the barest wisp of a plot and characters in the work which are completely overwhelmed by the rather poorly written sexual moments that appear.

Really, the hottest parts of the work, erotica-wise, are when the main Succubus of the work, Agrat Bat Mahlat, appears, has her way with the main character and then… sort of vanishes into the background for the rest of the story. There are other Succubi that appear, who are not named, but those appearances are rather flat and rote in how they are told. The coming into this world I like, description-wise, but beyond that there isn’t much heat or interest for me. As well, to a point, they appear to be somewhat stereotypical in appearance, though there is a hint of something more that should have been explored more in the story, but wasn’t.

The work does not read well, mainly because, over and over again ‘You’ are described as doing something then ‘You’ are described doing something else before ‘You’ go off and have ‘Your’ way with every woman ‘You’ encounter. The entire work continues in this vein and after a while that just becomes very painful to read. I don’t feel like the author did themselves any good in writing in this way. It would have been much more effective to give the main character a name, write from their perspective and in doing so, make a connection with the reader.

As well, there isn’t a real plot through the work so much as there are a series of sex scenes linked together with the main character moving from place to place. Past that, the attitude of the main character, for me, makes them dis-likeable from almost the first thing they do. That shouldn’t happen because what is the point to reading a story when you have to struggle with the events, don’t care about the characters, well, save for Agrat, but that’s another point altogether, and by the end one is left wondering what was the point of the story in the first place?

The work needs a lot of editing, better focus, more story, and even that isn’t quite enough for the focus on the erotica which needs it’s own improvements. It doesn’t have to be romance or anything like that, but it does have to, at some point, have some value to it.

The work ends with nothing really being resolved, many open doors to continue through, and a lot of questionable actions that lead to the ending which does really nothing. I have said many times in my reviews that story is important, characters matter, and if those two things connect, then the erotica is something special. I can’t say that here.

I’ll give this work one pitchfork out of five.

An interesting concept, but beyond that the work needs editing, focus, a reason for what happens most of all. ‘Just because’ isn’t a good enough reason to have something happen. The story comes in the details and this work doesn’t have them.

I will look for the following work in the series when it appears to see if the author improves on this work. I hope so.



May 29 2015

A Review of Her Incubus by Elizabeth Zanders

Her Incubus by Elizabeth Zanders

Her Incubus by Elizabeth Zanders

One of the things that bothers me the most is a summary about a work that offers what sounds like an interesting premise, with a storyline that seems like it could be quite a good read and then the story itself completely tosses that summery aside for a hot flash.

It’s not so much the hot flash that is a problem. it is that the author seems to have thought reading the summary would give enough background about the characters that actually telling about them, both of them, in the actual story, would be a waste of time.

It wouldn’t be. And they needed to.

  • Title: Her Incubus
  • Author: Elizabeth Zanders
  • Length: 8 Pages
  • Publishing Date: July 17, 2014
  • This work at

The work tells the story of:

Alisha O’Connell has dreamed about her perfect man ever since she was old enough to know what she wanted in the opposite sex. Little did she know that her black-haired, blue eyed “dream man” is a fallen angel named Aidan, and he’s been waiting for the right time to come into her life and show her everything she’s been missing. Alisha doesn’t stand a chance of resisting him because Aidan is more than just a fallen angel, he’s got the powers of an incubus, too.

Alisha has been dreaming about her perfect man for a long time now. Making a wish that he was real makes him so and then she discovers that submitting to him is all that she could ask for… whatever he is.

As a whole the story concept, if you accept the summary as being the idea of the story, seems like a good one. Girl wishes for lover, lover appears, lover is a fallen angel slash Incubus and gives Alisha her first sexual encounter.

The problem is that who and what Aidan is never comes into play during the story. He magically appears in the shower with Alisha, and after a short moment of confusion on Alisha’s part, they have a sexual encounter in which Aidan takes control of things, makes Alisha submit to him, and then… the story ends.

While quite a lot about Alisha is told in the opening of the work, and she is told really very well, Aiden is… just there. He’s a means to an end with the personality to match and that, for me, was really disappointing. There isn’t much interplay between the two, there isn’t much in the way of any explanation of what Aiden is.

He just appears, promises to give Alisha everything she wants, then as he does so, demands a truth from her, which she succumbs to, and then after their climax the story comes to an end with a promise to close the work.

The work felt very rushed from the instant that Aiden appeared, and that’s a shame as the way he does so could have opened the story to more character development, more storytelling, more understanding about Aiden, why he was attracted to Alisha… just a lot more than a build up to a erotic shower scene and a short postscript.

I’m giving this work two and a half out of five pitchforks.

A story that started out well, but then lost its way for getting to the erotica. Connection the book summary to the actual story well is always a good idea and in doing so this could have been a lot more than eight pages.




May 28 2015

Succubi Image of the Week 384

Something quite a bit dominant today on the Tale for the Succubi of the Week. There’s a certain look that I think works for really dominant Succubi, or those that are if not Succubi then at least temptation in some way, shape or form… All you need to do, of course, is sign on the dotted line…

09 - Demon by W-Orks

09 – Demon by W-Orks

This work is called Demon and is by an artist on DeviantArt called W-Orks. The original page with this art is here and the artist’s page is here as well.

Overall I like the concept behind this image and how it all comes together, though I will say that her expression is a bit odd for me and takes something from the work that I can’t quite put my finger on. I like her choice of outfit, the shoes, her tail and I can live with her horns, they are a bit large I think, but then she’s less of a seductive Succubus and more of a negotiator for souls. Obviously she is very dominant, it seems like one of her pets… or conquests… is serving her in their own way.

The setting around her, the poster, the contract she is holding, the slightly 1950s wall poster feel to the entire work is very striking and it is something that I haven’t seen before which is what brought my attention to this art in the first place.

I only wish that she wasn’t quite so much a sourpuss in her expression…




May 27 2015

Perhaps a start to some Dark Succubus Desire as a costume?

Desire Dark Angel CostumeA slightly different costume this time on the Tale. I’ve been pondering how to mix up something as an option for a costume this year. I found this angel costume and… I wonder what I can do with it…

This is called the Desire Dark Angel Costume and it comes with a satin dress with embroidered wings on the bodice, a skirt with flowing organza and chiffon a gray and black halo headband and a pair of chiffon wings with wire support. Shoes not included of course and it sells for $175 US, though it has been on sale for less than that.

And, at least for me, I wonder about losing the halo, replacing it with some horns, black I think. A red wig, and a black tail. The shoes can stay as can the rest of the costume.

Sort of Tail in one of her moods perhaps? It’s actually an interesting thought for me at least as I haven’t really dressed up as my “other self” in some time.

Coming to think about this a little more, I am really starting to like the idea and I wonder why the costume designers didn’t give a more devilish option for this outfit…

I’ll have to try my hand at this I think.

I’ll give this, after some changes and alterations, three out of five pitchforks.

This could turn into something… Not sure quite what, but it could…



May 26 2015

A Review of Nice Guy by Mike Leon

Nice Guy by Mike Leon

Nice Guy by Mike Leon

Succubi are not always the central characters of a work. Sometimes they are passing characters, a shadow in the background, even a thought and not much more.

It is somewhat troubling when they are an afterthought, a means for theme in a story to continue, and the core of a character’s life to be brought to the fore for the umpteenth time. A single line of speech, a few words of description aren’t really much. Even if the succubus is given a name with that small taste, that isn’t really having a succubus in the story to any real extent.

  • Title: Nice Guy
  • Author: Mike Leon
  • Length: 10 Pages
  • Publishing Date: August 24, 2014
  • This work at

The work tells of:

Tom has been friend-zoned his entire life, but he finally found the woman for him–and she’s a real scream.

Tom meets with a friend and she doesn’t really want anything more from him but being a friend. A rash decision turns that choice into something horrible that ends in ashes for all.

The story summary with this work is a bit misleading and considering that this work appears under the succubus keyword search, you might think that the succubus might be a core character in the story. In short she isn’t and honestly there isn’t really a good reason for her to be in this story other than for the irony that depends on it when the story comes to a close.

The succubus of the work, Mahalath, appears for exactly one page, speaks exactly one line of dialog, and with that single line the effects of the rest of the story, what Tom does and so on, and makes all of it meaningless. There isn’t a really good meaningful reason for Mahalath to be in this work other than for the sake of irony. While she is a succubus, looks like one, and would seem to be an interesting character if she had appeared towards the beginning of the work or even at some points through it, her appearance just adds nothing to the story.

What the story is, and consists of, is the self loathing and desperation that Tom has seen throughout his life and the desperate choice he makes as a result. It tells of a life that wants one piece of happiness in whatever way it can be managed, but has never been able to have that moment because Tom is a “nice guy” and in being so that means, at least from his point of view, that he is less of a man.

I didn’t like that honestly, the complete loss of self, of hope, of deciding that all he had left was a myth to turn to which he could make his own. In that comes the horror of the work, the things that Tom does to his friend Rebecca, the explanations be tells her, the final solution to his troubles that involves her. It is just an awful thing to watch unfold and that has, if not shock value, then it comes with a lot of stereotypes which I, again, do not like.

While the work is written well, the atmosphere of each scene is very detailed, the thoughts of Tom are clear and painfully so, the reactions of Rebecca are achingly sad, that’s not enough. There is no hope, no light, nothing that has any kind of positive aspect to it. The work is just a very dark, painful read, at least for me, and I didn’t enjoy it.

I’m giving this work two out of five pitchforks.

This isn’t a story about a succubus. It’s just a sad, sad story with a sadder ending which has not the impact it otherwise could have. There was really no reason for the succubus to appear, and it would have been a much more tragic and powerful work if she did not. The ending does not make this story and that just takes all of the rest of it and turns it into ashes.