Aug 02 2015

A Review of My Teacher the Futa Succubus by Sasha Scott

My Teacher the Futa Succubus by Sasha Scott

My Teacher the Futa Succubus by Sasha Scott

There are some stories which are rather hard to read as a whole. That sometimes is the writing, the tone, occasionally it is all of the spelling mistakes. Sometimes it is trying to read a work where it feels like the story was translated from another language and badly so.

But then there are stories where it seems like someone read a manga, wrote out the dialog and tried to piece it all together using translation software. At that point the story just is completely unreadable.

  • Title: My Teacher the Futa Succubus
  • Author: Sasha Scott
  • Length: 25 Pages
  • ASIN: B0135H2T1W
  • Publishing Date: July 31, 2015
  • This work at Amazon.com

It is the story of:

Yuki has an incredible crush on his teacher, Miss Britton. However, when he confesses to her he finds out her secret, she’s actually a futa. And little does he know she has another secret too, she’s actually a succubus.

An issue presents itself as Miss Britton prefers girls to boys, but she has just the solution when she warps Yuki’s feminine male body into that of a full fledged woman, signalling the start of a new life filled with debauchery.

Yuki is attracted to his teacher and then discovers she is a succubus, falling to her powers. But Miss Britton doesn’t like boys, changes Yuki to suit her needs, and then… things happen.

I know that’s not a really good summary of this work, but in truth that reflects how poorly this work is written, edited, and presented. I found it incredibly difficult to read, at times actually painful to try to understand what was happening. The work reads, very much, like it was written in Japanese, as a manga book, then dropped into Google translate before being published with no editing, spellchecking, or the most basic of touchups to make it read better and make some kind of sense.

One example of how hard this work is to read can be found in this single paragraph:

He wiggled closer until he was pressed opposite her, nervously squirming around against the front of her desk. She slowly rose upwards, rising up above the small asian boy. Her hands grasped down across his face, freezing him in shock. She drew down, closer and closer, her hot breaths stroking over his features. Her piercing glance stirred into his eyes.

It’s just awful honestly. The entire work reads like this, spelling mistakes, punctuation errors and so on.The grammar is poor, the story is barely there beneath the writing. The characters are hard to understand, what they are doing is as well. There’s such a disconnection between what the author is trying to say and what is written on the page.

Miss Britton is a succubus, at least she claims to be one, and yes, she seems to be, but then there’s really nothing else told about her, other than she likes girls rather than boys and is a futa. There’s a gender change scene that makes little sense, and then the story falls into a sex scene, which isn’t at all erotic.

The entire work needs a lot of assistance just to be clear in what happens within it. As much as I try to find the good in the works that I review, in this one I just cannot manage to do that. The author would be well advised to completely rewrite this, clean up the dialog, make the story sensical, and, at the least, fix all of the spelling and grammar errors. All this work manages to do is make me shake my head in disbelief. If this wasn’t a Kindle Unlimited I would have felt cheated in having to pay for this work.

Zero pitchforks out of five.

This is just such a painful thing to read by far. A lot of editing, spelling correction, and rewriting to make the characters sound like characters and not a mishmash of strung together phrases would be a good place to start.

Aug 02 2015

A Review of Misty Shalimar – Modern Day Succubus – Cowgirl Up! by Pamela Parkman

Misty Shalimar - Modern Day Succubus - Cowgirl Up! by Pamela Parkman

Misty Shalimar – Modern Day Succubus – Cowgirl Up! by Pamela Parkman

It has been quite some time since there has been a work about Misty Shalimar, who appeared in a work that I reviewed back in January 2013. At the time I had some very high praise for the story and Misty herself I thought was a really good Succubus character.

A second work appeared last year and while Misty has returned… The story itself is missing something. It doesn’t quite read the same nor does it have quite the same style as the first work did.

That’s not to say that work isn’t interesting, for it is, but compared to the first… It needs some help in a few places.

  • Title: Misty Shalimar – Modern Day Succubus – Cowgirl Up!
  • Author: Pamela Parkman
  • Length: 30 Pages
  • ASIN: B00L8FWN06
  • Publishing Date: June 23, 2014
  • This work at Amazon.com

The story tells the tale of:

Young Misty and The Professor go for a short vacation to a cowboy town in Northern Arizona. Misty almost lets herself go too far with a local after riding a bull stirs her inner juices. The young cowboy’s life is saved when a local thug decides he wants to take Misty for the ride of her life.

Three years have passed since Misty became a succubus and in that time she and the Professor have been roaming around America looking for those that deserve Misty’s personal kind of justice. They take a break in a small town in the middle of nowhere and Misty is attracted to someone that interests her. However someone else decides that Misty shouldn’t have ignored him and things take a turn that she didn’t expect… or want.

Misty is every bit the interesting, funny, and smart character that she was in the first work. She’s a bit older, perhaps a little more jaded about what has happened to her, but that can be chalked up to character growth and she seems to have done a lot of that in the time between stories about her. But in spite of all that she has been through, she’s still someone that that knows the difference between right and wrong and does everything she can to remember that.

The story doesn’t get Misty into any really hot erotic situations, though there are a few moments when she gets all worked up that I thought were really funny and cute at the same time. It’s more a story of the things that she has to deal with now that she is, after all, to others, a really sexy woman that they want to “get to know better.” This sets up a really unique moment of Misty riding a mechanical bull with a hidden secret that Misty isn’t going to soon forget. But it also puts her in the situation of being held captive by someone and then trying to find a way out. It’s during this part of the story that many questions about what she’ll do and what might happen come up. The way the work ends isn’t all that much of a surprise, considering Misty’s view of things and I’m glad that it wasn’t stereotypical, which it could have been very easily.

Many quirky, interesting, and at times, amusing characters dot the story, and it has the same humour that the first work had. The Professor is a source of much of that, as he was in the first book, and really I was smiling through the story when he appeared. It’s clear that Misty has picked up a lot of his mannerisms and humour as well which also makes the story better for that happening.

As much as I loved the first work in this series, the second just leaves something to be desired. The one thing that this work needs, more than anything else is a good editing. There are errors from the first page to the last and that took a lot of the enjoyment I had in finding another story about Misty away. They aren’t glaring errors or omissions by any means, but they just brought me to a halt every time I came across them and that shouldn’t have happened considering the work as a whole.

As such while it is a cute and fun story that I really liked, I just didn’t find I liked it as much as the first book. That’s a shame because the promise is there, and it comes very close to how much I enjoyed the first work in the series.

I’ll give this work three and a half pitchforks out of five.

There are just too many tense, word and punctuation errors that bothered me. Misty isn’t quite the same character as well, which is a shame really. I think too much time has passed between the author writing the first work and this one. Perhaps they will see a way to write another story about Misty in a shorter period of time…

 

Tera

Aug 01 2015

A cute Morrigan Aensland speed painting YouTube

Another interesting little YouTube of an artist creating some lovely Morrigan Aensland art this time on the Tale.

And if you cannot see the video here on the Tale, please try this link:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LcGC9YbnEo4

As well, here is the finished artwork in case YouTube deletes the video for whatever reason:

Morrigan Aensland by The Ink Monster

Morrigan Aensland by The Ink Monster

The artist calls themselves The Ink Monster and you can find the original page where this art is displayed here on Tumblr.

Really this is just a lovely work of art, especially like Morrigan’s eyes and smile most of all. Her expression is bordering on bemusement I think. Considering that’s one of my favourite expression, it’s rather obvious why I like this art so much…

 

Tera

Jul 31 2015

A Review of Magic and Metaphors by Dou7g and Amanda Lash

Magic and Metaphors by Dou7g and Amanda Lash

Magic and Metaphors by Dou7g and Amanda Lash

Catching up with my reviews of the works of the author Dou7g in the series called Succubus Temptations. You can find my reviews of the series here on the Talehere, herehere as well as here and here and also here. The previous two works in the series were reviewed here and here as well.

One of the things that really isn’t explored in a lot of series is how things work, especially when it comes to magic. That is a shame really because having the right teachers, and incentive, can make for a very cute and hot little lesson on its own…

The work tells of:

This is the next installment after Demons and Diplomacy. The two sides have reached a truce and Megan and Kendra attempt to help Amy learn magic.

The summary is a bit short, and I think it’s more like: “A truce keeps our heroes, and others, from coming to blows. In the meantime, Amy tries to learn magic, but doesn’t get anywhere until Megan and Kendra give her a ;tongue-lashing; to loosen her up… and everyone knows it.”

Another cute and funny piece of the series, focusing on Amy, who wants to be helpful and to be so is trying to find her way to the magic within her. Lorelei cannot seem to help her do so, but when Megan appears, and manages to get somewhere, more than just how to do magic is revealed. A lot about Megan herself, what she thinks about what she has done, how she feels about Edmond, and Amy’s attentions to him, also comes into play. This does expand Megan’s character a lot and I enjoyed that very much.

Kendra then appears, and the three become very close and personal in the lessons taught which marks the return of a little hot flash between the three that’s fun and sexy in many ways. Mixed into the erotica is a neat explanation of how magic works, and I couldn’t help but smile as Amy was taught her lessons.

There’s also some development in Edmund and Magus, telling about their thoughts, how they are dealing with what is happening, that I liked as well. Quite a lot of plot setup happens outside of the magic users having their fun and it’s an interesting contrast between the two threads in the story.

The work climaxes in more than one way, for several characters, but the last few pages allow the appearance of a twist in the plot that foretells some problems for our heroes. What happens to Magus in those pages is, honestly, some of the funniest passages in the work so far and just goes to show how literally some people can be.

A lovely pause between the conflicts and challenges our heroes face, some lovely character development and some light hearted erotica all make this wonderful. I think the turning of focus towards two characters who are new breathes life into things, makes the work stronger, and refocuses the series well.

Four out of five pitchforks.

There are storms on the horizon, how our heroes address them will be interesting to see…

 

Tera

Jul 31 2015

A Review of Morning Star by Snow McNally

Morning Star by Snow McNally

Morning Star by Snow McNally

Another review today of a work that appeared so very long ago, told a wonderful story… And then vanished, for the most part. It’s a story that is quite a bit different than what you might expect, tells that story amazingly well, and offers so many questions that need to be answered.

But the promise in this work was never realized in a second promised work in the series. Something that has always bothered me to be honest. Because it’s that good a story.

Do you know who you are? Are you sure? And when the truth is thrust upon you, can you believe it, deal with it, and still be who you are inside of yourself?

  • Title: Morning Star
  • Author: Snow McNally
  • Length: 256 Pages
  • ASIN: B008ZCBVM6
  • ISBN-10: 147914259X (Paperback)
  • ISBN-13: 978-1479142590 (Paperback)
  • Publishing Date: August 17, 2012
  • This work at Amazon.com

It is the story of:

All Alex wants is to feel loved, and not just used. Instead, he meets Rebecca, who seems to want nothing more than to torment him. Still, if you knew her ex, you’d understand. Somehow he finds himself dragged through a side of the world he never knew existed, and confronts all the things he never wanted to believe in. A romance of hate as much as love, featuring cosplay, zombies, cross-dressing, succubi, maids and a world-class heist, not to mention a love triangle with the very last person you’d ever want interested in your love life, let alone competing for a part in it.

Take a trip to Hell, which is a very different place to what you’d expect, and really not all that unpleasant.

Alex is an artist trying to make ends meet in his world. After breaking up with what he thought was his girlfriend, he comes into contact with Rebecca. In spite of her being odd, immensely so, Alex turns out to be the one person that she likes. And that could well be a real problem when who Alex is, what’s going on around him, and what it all means comes to pass.

The work as a whole is rather a complicated story, but that’s hidden away in moments that take Alex out of his comfort zone in a lot of ways. He learns a lot about the people he thought he knew and in that comes the start of learning about himself. And the one most responsible for that is Rebecca.

Rebecca is… different. She appears to be something of a Goth in a lot of ways but that hides who and what she really is. Alex’s discovery of that, what it means for his relationship with her, and more importantly, what their future might be is something memorable. It’s obvious that Rebecca is not exactly what she appears to be from the beginning of the work and what that means is quite a surprise when it all comes out, though there are hints from the beginning.

Possibly the most revealing, and for me, the one that sticks out for me the most is this passage:

She had a red corset, a tiny red miniskirt, black and red striped stockings and red heels, as well as red gloves to round it out. That wasn’t quite as distracting as the red devil horns on her head, or the long pointy tail sticking out from behind her. She looked incredibly sexy, a fact which I was trying my hardest to ignore, without much success.

She caught me looking, and made a face. It was somewhere between irritation and guilt, and I didn’t even want to begin thinking about what that meant. Clearly she hadn’t expected to see me. Well, I live here. Get over it.

“Nice horns,” I said casually as I cracked an egg over the frying pan. “Suits you.”

“Shut up,” she said, grabbing them and the headband they must’ve been attached to, and tossing them back into her room.

That one passage, more than any other. endeared Rebecca to me. As the story continued and the real truth about Alex came out, and she needed to make a choice, one that didn’t have a good outcome no matter what she decided to do, she made a choice.

I felt as if Rebecca was a Succubus or had a lot of Succubus in her, but in that choice came the moment when it was made clear who she was. That choice reflected on Alex as well and bound the two of them together in the most amazing way.

The work reads as a bit of a fantasy adventure mixed in with a mystery, which I thought worked very well. There isn’t much in the way of erotica seen, but the moment when Rebecca and Alex first share a kiss is one of the most amazing passages that I have read in some time.

There are a few very minor spelling mistakes in the work, but nothing that really took away from the amazing characters, story, and purpose it had. It comes to a satisfying conclusion as well, the moment that comes feels right and does right by Alex and Rebecca as well.

The thing is that the work ends on a cliff hanger in a lot of ways. Rebecca’s future is hinted at, as is Alex’s. There’s a promise of what their future will be, but we never see that unfold and I wish that it had been for all of the buildup that the work took in getting to that point.

It left me wanting. To this day… I still am.

I’ll give this work four out of five pitchforks.

I wish that this work was available as an eBook still, but it isn’t, you can only find it as a paperback now. That’s a shame because there’s so much told in this work that restricting it in that was just doesn’t do this author any sort of favour.

I wish that the second work would have appeared, mainly to see what happened to Rebecca, who and what she is now, and what that means to her and Alex going forwards. Lots of questions left unanswered, lots of story hinted at and suggested…

But we’ll never see any of that. I wish that wasn’t true.

 

Tera

Jul 30 2015

Succubi Image of the Week 393

Some Morrigan Aensland cuteness this time on the Tale for the Succubi Image of the Week. The interesting thing about Morrigan is that there are all sorts of different ways to draw her. She can be evil or not, be young or mature, over the top sexy, seductive, or simply just cute. I love finding images of Morrigan being cute and the one this week really is that and more…

Morrigan Aensland by ぺつお

Morrigan Aensland by ぺつお

 

I found this art originally on Pixiv, and you can find the page on that site with this image here. In a way, this art of Morrigan reminds me a lot of Lilith Aensland in that Morrigan looks quite a lot younger than she normally does. Her smile is adorable, really the focus of the work, and her pose and how her hair is swept around her just makes this a lovely image of her.

I do like this artist’s drawing style, it’s a neat mix of anime and cartoon that I think fits Morrigan’s character well and does bring out her personality well. Especially that look in her eyes and her smile.

Just a lovely work of art and I do smile when I see it…

 

Tera

Jul 29 2015

The bride needs a better costume…

Deluxe Bride of SatanIt seems like the talent in costumes is moving away from designing the costume itself and into trying to find new and more silly names for them. Why that really matters I have no idea, but really shouldn’t the talent and imagination go into the costume and the name can look after itself?

This thing is called the “Deluxe” Bride of Satan costume and it comes with the dress, choker and veil headpiece and those chains on the front of the dress.

It normally sells for $75 US, but you can find it on sale for around $35 most of the time.

Notice the quotation marks I put around “Deluxe”? I can’t really say that I see the “Deluxe in this disaster. It’s simply ugly, the horns in the headpiece look bad and it just doesn’t do a single thing for me.

If someone was trying to create a medieval I can sort of see this as being an option, but for something Succubi-like it just has nothing going for it whatsoever… and that’s being kind.

There’s not a single thing that I like about it, there’s no possible way to improve it, make it better, or save it save for leaving it to gather dust on a shelf somewhere…

Yet another zero out of five pitchforks.

There will be more I know.

Why does that have to be in the first place?

 

Tera

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