Dec 17 2015

Succubi Image of the Week 413

A bit of a darker image of a Succubus this week on the Tale. Certainly it is rather moody. perhaps a bit mysterious as well. She is one of the Succubi however and in that comes the question of what her story might be…

Succubus by JunuArt

Succubus by JunuArt

This work is titled Succubus and is by an artist on DeviantArt called JunuArt. You can find the original page on DeviantArt where I found this work here and this artist’s page can be found here.

There’s quite the air of mystery in this art, mainly in that you need to focus on it for a little while to pick out some of the details that are shrouded in the darkness around her. I really can’t say she has a tail, but she does have horns while just come out of the darkness. It’s a neat effect of having her skin seem to glow slightly, to just overpower the details of her body, and in doing so the reality of what she is becomes hidden.

I think this would make for an interesting fantasy book cover or something similar, though I know that it is a bit more nudity that is preferred. Still, a little bit of shaping of the dark around her to cover a bit more of her form and it really would work…

A mysterious Succubus, one that should have a story to tell…

 

Tera

Dec 16 2015

Naughty Thoughts for a Naughty Costume…

Dark Passions CostumeChristmas is coming, it’s right around the corner, and my thoughts have turned to the question of being… naughty. Of course, to be naughty on Christmas takes a certain look, style, and that special little thing that makes it all work. It might be a little risqué, it might be a little “Tail” in character… But then, that can be a lot of fun…

Of course to have that fun means taking a lot of time to put the pieces together and spend what it takes to make naughty happen…

This is called the Dark Passions Costume and it comes with… Well, really all you get its the drape and nothing else and it costs $30 US. The description cannot make up its mind whether it is made of leather or latex, it’s faux leather obviously, and there are some other odd things about the listing for this that gets a little confusing.

Still, setting that aside, besides the drape, the boots cost $85, the lingerie is another $70. I don’t care for the hood, and would have it removed, and a pair of black horns, and a red wig, would be around $40. So in order to have a look like this, it would cost somewhere around $225 US.

Or, speaking hypothetically of course, I could just buy the drape as I have everything else already and have something… interesting… for Christmas…

At least I think it is, and next week my Eternal will have to let me know how “interesting” it was for a Christmas gift…

I’ll give this three and a half out of five pitchforks.

Things went from thoughts to action and I think the result will be worth the small investment…

 

Tera

Dec 15 2015

A Review of the Demon Trilogy by Dean Chills

Dealing with the Demon by Dean Chills

Dealing with the Demon by Dean Chills

A short Incubus series for review this time on the Tale. It is both short in books, there are only three, and short on length, each work is less than 20 pages in length. The series is called the Demon Trilogy and it’s one of the rare instances when a series has a clear beginning, middle and end.

Sometimes the question is asked: What do you need? The more important question is: What are you willing to do? Both questions matter in their own way and both can make their own pleasures and fears come true.

  • Title: Dealing with the Demon
  • Author: Dean Chills
  • Publishing Date: September 20, 2013
  • Length: 20 Pages
  • ASIN: B00UUXWZ0U
  • Publishing Date: March 21, 2015
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells about:

When Elizabeth bought her sister a decorative box at a garage sale, she had no idea that it contained a secret. When she accidentally summons a pleasure demon, she’s surprised that he doesn’t scare her. Then he really turns on the charm and things get completely out of control.

Will Elizabeth lose her soul or just have a good time? Find out in this straight erotic tale of what goes on between a woman and her Incubus.

Elizabeth comes into possession of a means to summon a demon, more specifically an Incubus. Not quite understanding what power she holds, she does so and then finds herself smitten by Abel and he with her.

Most of the work revolves around Elizabeth speaking about her past, her family, where she works, and the utter lack of having any kind of “real” relationship. All of this takes up more than three-quarters of this work before she finally comes into contact with Abel in, what she thinks, is a dream.

Abel’s most interesting feature isn’t physical, though he has horns and some obvious incubus features. He even admits, quite clearly, that he is an incubus, though Elizabeth seems not to understand what that means. When he does appear, there is a hint that he has been trapped somewhere for some time and Elizabeth frees him. It’s not clear if that matters here in the first work in any clear way however.

There is a slight D/s theme that occurs as the erotica begins, Elizabeth becoming submissive towards Abel’s words and actions. The running commentary she makes about smells, touch, and taste are cute, sometimes funny, and very descriptive, which I did like. There is a clear change in Elizabeth’s personality the more she is in contact with Abel, but whether that is a kind of mind control or simply that she is smitten by him isn’t clear.

The work’s erotica is a hot flash, actually two different scenes, both of which have their own heat, but there are moments when Elizabeth’s thoughts are so out of place that the heat is overcome by trying to figure out why Elizabeth’s thoughts are so scattered. The erotica is clearly written to place Abel in the dominant position, but before that, Elizabeth’s exploration of Abel I thought was decidedly hot and I enjoyed that scene very much.

There is a clear warning given by Abel which seems to set out why the series is but three books in length and the questions that are left, mainly over what happens next, what has Elizabeth gotten herself into, and most of all, is Abel as unique as I hope he is? The next work will tell.

I’ll give this work three out of five pitchforks.

Too much time spent on minutia in the beginning of the work, which I think hurt things as a whole. I didn’t really see the point of talking about tangential subjects and eating up pages doing so when the point of the story could have been gotten to sooner.

Dueling for the Demon by Dean Chills

Dueling for the Demon by Dean Chills

The second work in the series brings some conflict into Abel and Elizabeth’s lives, but it also answers a few important questions.

When you find someone and then are threatened with them being taken from you, there are choices to be made. Can you find the strength within yourself to overcome and keep that which you believe it yours, or are you fated to play someone else’s game?

  • Title: Dueling for the Demon
  • Author: Dean Chills
  • Publishing Date: September 20, 2013
  • Length: 20 Pages
  • ASIN: B00UUS724Y
  • Publishing Date: March 27, 2015
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells about:

On Elizabeth’s second night with the Demon, Abel needs her help. She must battle the small but powerful witch who wants to destroy him. The battle goes poorly for Elizabeth until Abel is forced to intervene with the only power he has… that of pleasure and delight.

Will she go too far in this fight? Will she even survive the ordeal? Is it love all around, or will there be a funeral? Find out in this erotic tale of sex and warfare in the realms of Hell itself.

Elizabeth believes that her encounter with Abel was all a dream. He couldn’t be real, there was no proof and so she sets out to dream about him again. This night however, things do not go quite as she expected, and in the end Elizabeth has to fight for her life, her sense of self, and to find out just what reality really is for her.

The second work in the series is something of a mix between an action-adventure, a lesbian love scene, if forced to be so, and, again, Abel being dominant over Elizabeth. As in the first work, there is a lot of build up and world building that I did like before the story dropped into one sex scene that really wasn’t all that much so and another that also didn’t have the heat that was in the first work.

There was a disconnect I felt in the story, that things were rushed quite a lot in this work and I think that hurt things overall. There could have been one single fight scene, there were several, and that might have been too much. There’s clearly some mind control being used by Abel in this work, but it comes across as rather heavy-handed and I didn’t find that to be interesting or reflective on Abel’s character, at least what has been told about him to this point in the story.

At the end of the work, Elizabeth discovers something left behind by Abel to convince her that he is real, and all she experienced was real too. But there’s one thing not mentioned which should have made things clear. Elizabeth injures herself in several ways in the fights and she should have felt some of the effects in some way. At least in that happening there would be more impact than the thing she finds. It’s a bit odd and that bothered me at the end of this work.

Setting that aside, the action-adventure part of the work is well done and I liked that part of it, but the erotica just didn’t connect with me, there was something missing and because of that I just found myself turning the pages to get to the end of the work and see what happened there. At that point Abel reveals to Elizabeth that the next time she summons him, it will be the last, but gives her an option to think about. Thinking it a dream at first she doesn’t take that seriously. Finding that all was real leaves her a lot to think about.

I’ll give this work two and a half out of five pitchforks.

While there was a good deal of explanation, of understanding, the erotica just fell apart and that hurt the work. It felt like there was a shift in the characters, especially Abel and I’m not sure that needed to happen here.

Dying for the Demon by Dean Chills

Dying for the Demon by Dean Chills

The third work in the series brings the overall story to a conclusion, but in doing so leaves some things unanswered, but in many other ways, some things are revealed that explain much of why things unfolded as they did.

A choice is given, a choice is made. What do you give up, do you do so, and more importantly, can you trust the one that asks you for the sacrifice? If the answer is yes, what do you receive in return for giving everything away?

  • Title: Dying for the Demon
  • Author: Dean Chills
  • Publishing Date: September 20, 2013
  • Length: 20 Pages
  • ASIN: B00UUS6YMU
  • Publishing Date: April 3, 2015
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells about:

Elizabeth cannot help but summon Abel for a third and final time. He takes her to an exotic beach, then to a remote cave. They have more impossibly wonderful sex in both places, leading up to a fateful decision. Elizabeth has had a fantastic three days, but is she willing to die for more?

Elizabeth comes to terms with Abel being real and makes a fateful decision. She is given all she desires in one night, but loses all that she is in the same evening. In the end, all that remains is Abel’s promise, his word, and what simply is.

Of the three parts of this series, the last is, by far, the best. That’s mainly to the story, the questions raised and all of the things that happen in it. When the conclusion arrives, it’s bittersweet in many ways for Elizabeth, but at the same time she’s given something she’s desired from the moment she saw Abel. Him.

The underpinnings of Abel’s existence are finally explained and they make sense in their own way. There’s a certain theme that has run through this series and it comes to the forefront here. Abel isn’t truly evil, it really never has been shown that he is, but some of his actions are. There is a moment in the story that I personally did not like as would have been just as happy not to have seen. It smacked of trying to make Abel “evil” for no good reason and that didn’t fit with all else that happened.

Throughout the story, Elizabeth is told that she must make a choice, over and over again, and she does think about it, over and over again. She is influenced, quite clearly, by Abel and whether that is a kind of mind control or not is open to interpretation. She does experience the highs, and regrettably, the lows that Abel offers and comes to a conclusion that, for her, makes some sense.

There are a series of hot flashes in this work, one as I mentioned that I didn’t like, but as a whole they are written well and I liked when Elizabeth had some control over things. Abel being forceful didn’t work and it felt like something that was tossed in at the last moment.

When the conclusion comes, Elizabeth makes a rather obvious choice and the warning that “no mortal can be with me more than three times” makes the answer to that riddle very clear. How that happens isn’t done by hand waving an explanation, it’s a clear, well thought out reason and how that unfolded worked overall. But, to be clear, it is a sad ending, one that I didn’t like for how sad it was, but at the same time, Elizabeth’s future does interest me.

The work doesn’t end on a cliffhanger, rather it ends by closing Elizabeth’s story and that of Abel, to allow them to pass out of this story and onto what comes next. While it is an ending, it’s a bit unsatisfying, mainly in that it is rather quick, to the point, and leaves things coming to an abrupt ending.

I could easily see a fourth work, or a what happens to Elizabeth as she discovers the after, but if that doesn’t happen it’s not a bad thing. The work is complete and that does have some satisfaction within that.

I’ll give this work three and a half out of five pitchforks.

For the series as a whole, I felt that the promise of the stories and characters build up over time, but getting to that point took a lot of side trips and other unneeded moments that took away from the core story and the heat of the erotica. Given that the themes of each part of the series were as varied as they were, that the characters experienced a wide range of events, I think the author managed all of that well but needed to focus more on the core story.

I’ll give the series three out of five pitchforks.

A quick read, some good heat and two characters that were interesting. The series just needed more focus than it had at times…

 

Tera

Dec 15 2015

A Review of Eve Marshall: Succubus by Serene Makepeace

Eve Marshall: Succubus by Serene Makepeace

Eve Marshall: Succubus by Serene Makepeace

A review of a new book series that began just a few days ago today on the Tale. The main character seems to be a succubus, but she isn’t anything like one might expect her to be.

The question of revenge is one that can define who you are, but more importantly, what you are capable of. If what you are becomes intimately tied into what revenge you are seeking, then the question becomes if you can keep control of yourself, or if your darker needs consume you. Revenge is two-sided, so which side is the one that traps you? Because, in the end, you will be trapped somehow, by someone.

  • Title: Eve Marshall: Succubus
  • Author: Serene Makepeace
  • Length: 22 Pages
  • ASIN: B019AQ73UO
  • Publishing Date: December 12, 2015
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells the story of:

Eve Marshall is a woman on a mission to save her sister by any means necessary. Using all of her feminine guile and succubus charms, she removes all those that stand in her way. In this opening to the series we come across how it began, and her digressions with the wolfman and a reptilian.

Eve is a woman with a secret. When she is intimate with someone, they simply vanish into thin air, being consumed by her. When her sister goes missing, Eve takes it upon herself to find those responsible and make them pay. But when reality sets in, she has little choice but to join up with a group for help. But in doing so, Eve finds that she is losing herself to what she can do and the revenge she is seeking.

The story is, in many ways, a mixture of a mystery-adventure with a bit of erotica added in here and there. Overall, the story’s plot is interesting and there is just enough told about Eve’s past and the reasons for why she is on the path she is upon to hold the balance of the story together.

Eve herself has a very strong personality and her internal monologue is well defined and told. There is a bit of conflict within her, which I think adds more to her character as well. The question of whether she is a succubus or not is not exactly made clear however. She might be said to be a kind of succubus in what happens in the aftermath of being with another, but what happens is rather unique. There are no signs of horns or a tail, but there is a lot of supernatural themes and beings in the work, so Eve could well be this universe’s version of a succubus.

That all said, Eve’s singular focus in on finding her sister and finding revenge on those that have taken her. Because of this, Eve’s attitude, actions, and drive, all point towards that goal above all else and being so that mutes a lot of the rest of who she is. There is some told about that, about her sister, but it would have been nice to know more about each of them than what was told here.

There are two hot flashes of erotica in this work which are well written and have a good deal of heat in them both. They both tend to go a little over the top at a few points, which I think is mainly due to Eve’s abilities and what she does to those she is with. It isn’t so much the use of any sort of succubus ability, rather it is more about she being that which the other character wants and where things go from there.

The work needs a bit of editing, there are several points where misspelled words appear, at least one conversation doesn’t quite sound right as well. It would be nice if the author told more about Eve’s past and that of her sister going forwards as in this work that is mostly glossed over. The balance between erotica and story is fairly good, there being enough story to make the erotica mean something and make this more of a story about a woman that is a succubus than a succubus that is feeding on others.

Three and a half out of five pitchforks.

I think there needs to be more told about Eve, her sister and what revolves around them and I am trusting that the author will expand upon that part of the story. Rushing into the adventure without really telling more than the barest of reasons why Eve is doing what she is, and not telling much about who she is, is a large piece of the puzzle that is missing. The story is interesting, I think it has promise and I hope that the next work will build upon this one well.

 

Tera

Dec 14 2015

Needing By TeraS

A very short story today on the Tale, meant for one soul. It doesn’t say everything; really, it can’t, as much as I want it to. But it is a glimpse. Perhaps that is a hint, and in that comes more …

 

Needing
By TeraS

 

She lays upon red satin sheets, her body partly covered by them. A slender calf peeks out here, a bare shoulder there. Her arms are wrapped around a pillow, clutching it to her chest. She sleeps, but even as she does there is the hint of a smile upon her lips as a dream takes the dreamer away.

In her dream, she sleeps upon the same sheets, in the same way. Her blonde ponytail laying upon the sheets beside her as if pointing the way to her soft pink lips that smile ever so softly. There is a thin, red, metal collar that shimmers under the moonlight, draping about her slender neck. She sleeps, knowing that her Mistress is looking over her, watching. Across the room, Mistress sits upon her throne, her green eyes somehow brighter than the moonlight passing over the body of the sleeping beauty.

Mistress’ cheek rests against her hand as she sits there in thought, pondering the one that means everything to her. She doesn’t wish to awaken her, to disturb this rest. But she longs to be there, to hold her. She smiles at the thought of nuzzling her lips against the nape of her love’s neck, of wrapping her arms about the blonde, spooning against her, the dominant brunette’s warmth giving comfort to her love as she sleeps. She bites here lower lip at the thought of her love’s legs bound by a red tail, then her own leg over that, skin to skin, body to body, soul to soul.

Then, the thought comes to her that this is a dream.

Mistress stands, playing with the red sash that encircles her waist, holding the black robe about her. As she tilts her head to the right, her long red fingernails undo the knot, the sash loosens, and then her robe pools at her heels. For a moment, just a moment, she considers leaving them on, but then slips out of them, still not making a sound, not wishing to wake her love as she rests. Her long, red, heart-tipped tail sways slowly behind her as she moves closer. The moonlight now caresses her tanned skin as its only clothing, leaving patterns that seem to tease her form, cast her lips in and out of shadow, putting her so-green eyes into contrast with the night that watches them both.

She reaches the side of her love’s bed, pausing there once again. She considers for a time, one fingertip tracing over the sheets lightly, still trying not to awaken her love, at least not as yet. She could just simply be there with her, entwined as if she had been there from the moment love had fallen asleep: she could bend this dream.

Love feels the bed shift beneath her and it awakens her. Her nose is tickled by the scent of cherries, and her smile, once soft, becomes a little larger, a little needful, a little expectant. She stifles a giggle. She does not wish to embarrass Mistress in her playfulness, after all. The blonde keeps her eyes closed, following the shifting of the bed, her Mistress now so very close to her. She feels a fingertip lightly touch her exposed calf, followed by fingers, and then she holds her breath as the hand to which they belong begins to move. She knows her body is breaking out in goosebumps, her core heating, becoming slick as Mistress’ caresses her hand along the inside of love’s thigh, seeking that which the sheets have hidden.

The whimper of need almost escapes her as Mistress takes her hand away and nothing happens for a moment. That moment is long, stretching out into time. She aches for Mistress to continue, to play her Song.

The ache is answered by Mistress lying beside her, not quite touching her—the sheets are still there as a barrier between them. The next sensation is Mistress spooning against love from behind, their bodies pressing warmly against each other through the sheets. A soft kiss, light on love’s shoulder, the draping of one arm over love’s waist, legs entwined; she feels Mistress’ heat warming her. She cannot help herself, cannot restrain the sigh of bliss that escapes her now.

When Mistress purrs, her breath warm against love’s ear, she responds with full-throated moans. This is what she dreams of: being held, loved, cherished. She thinks of how wonderful this dream is, to have Mistress with her. The next kiss is upon her collar, the one that Mistress offered and she took without question or hesitation. She shivers at the sensation of it rubbing against her skin, telling all that see her that she is for Mistress alone and for always.

It is a wonderful … dream?

She opens her eyes to find it is morning, the sunlight coming through the windows where moonlight had been. She sighs, still clutching the pillow, imagining that she is holding Mistress instead. Drawing a breath, she senses something. It is familiar though she has never sensed it before: the sweet smell of cherries in the air; a presence there with her.

Love moves a hand from the pillow to touch about her neck and a thin metal collar is resting there. She smiles; this is still the dream, of course. She doesn’t have a collar, she isn’t owned. But for the one that loves her, she would be.

It is a wonderful … wish.

A voice she has never heard before, but knows intimately, asks: “Did you sleep well, Love?”

Holding the pillow to herself, the sheets about her, she turns over, a mix of fear and anticipation within herself at what she will find. Is it still a dream? Will she find an ebon-haired Goddess with green eyes, red horns, and a tail awaiting her?

The first thing she finds is the ebon hair, but no horns; the warm smile, but no tail; but definitely the so-green eyes. She swallows, trying to find the words to answer.

Mistress touches her lips, nodding: “Needs Love.”

Love kisses those fingers: “Thank you.”

Mistress draws closer, now laying against her love, looking into her eyes. No more words are needed, nothing else has to be said. The pillow is moved aside as fingers entwine, bodies touch, and the love for each other … just is.

The need to be loved transcends dreams and words. The giving of love is also a need to be fulfilled.

The love which feeds such needs can overcome anything …

Dec 13 2015

A Review of Dominating the Demon by Morgan Lockheart

Dominating the Demon by Morgan Lockheart

Dominating the Demon by Morgan Lockheart

Sometimes the point of a story is simply to get to the erotica. While there can be some time spent in setting up the characters, the events leading towards the erotica and perhaps even speak of some themes at a tangent to the erotica, many times it is the erotica that matters the most.

If that happens, and it does a lot of the time, then the erotica needs to be, more than anything else, interesting or if not that, at least have some kind of heat in it. Getting that heat, when a story is mainly one sex scene after the next is a challenge.

The work tells of:

It is Halloween night, when magic and mischief are abroad. Zoe, Briah and Jackie, a trio of witches seeking power call forth a demon from the lower pits of Hell using an ancient rite, binding him to our plane of existence for a short time. Arrogant and powerful, the demon is used to enslaving those who summon him and turning them into his servants so he is quite unprepared when they use a cunning plan to turn the tables on him.

Now bound and helpless, the demon lord is unable to stop the three witches from using his muscular and powerful body for their own carnal pleasures, forcing him to pleasure them in any way they choose. This night, he is their servant and they are his masters and whatever they demand of him, he must do. Little does he suspect that their sordid desires hide their true intention: to take his power and steal his infernal throne!

Zoe, Briah and Jackie gather on Halloween and summon a demon, play a risky game, and see if they can keep the upper hand through it all. One by one they take from the demon, but in the end the question is whether they won or if they actually lost and don’t know it.

The beginning of the work held some promise in that the background of the main characters was interesting and I thought that the time spent in telling of their lives, what they had done in the past as witches and what happened as a result, played well and interested me. Considering the length of time that took, building towards the main core of the story, I expected something more than what I read beyond that.

Once the summoning occurs, and the trap is sprung, the story devolves a bit into three individual sex stories tied together by what each of the women does to the trapped demon. There isn’t much in the way of anything beyond the erotica, save for some tangential references to domination and submission, a lot of yelling on the demon’s part and some rather odd remarks by each of the women as the story unfolds.

The demon is, as a whole, a stereotypical incubus, which didn’t interest me. There just wasn’t anything that I found to latch onto that would want me to know what happened next to him, or what dangers the women faced as their plan unfolded. It was a lot of fury that amounted to a lot of nothing as a whole and that didn’t work for me.

For me personally, I didn’t find that there was much heat in each of the scenes. I found that I didn’t like any of the characters all that much, that the story turned from being interesting into something that I just kept turning the pages hoping that some of the story seen at the beginning would return. But it really didn’t.

There was something missing and because there was the heat just didn’t build as much as I had hoped it would. There wasn’t something to make me want to see what happened to each of the characters as well. I felt disconnected from the story when I shouldn’t have been. I think that a good part of that was just that each of the woman had an attitude and personality that just rubbed me the wrong way. The same can be said of the incubus of the work, his attitude was even more grating.

While the writing itself was good and descriptive, that couldn’t make up for my not being involved in the story more deeply and i wanted to be. That promise at the beginning mattered and it just didn’t play out over the work. That’s the largest shame here of all.

Two and a half out of five pitchforks.

Perhaps less focus on the erotica would have been helpful. Certainly a lot less yelling and a bit more character building would have been good too. Expected more and just didn’t see it.

 

Tera

Dec 13 2015

A Review of Holidays in Hell by Erzabet Bishop

Holidays in Hell by Erzabet Bishop

Holidays in Hell by Erzabet Bishop

A cute and lovely piece of Incubus erotica this time for review on the Tale. This particular work was first published in 2013 under the same title by this author, but then was removed from publication until just a few days ago. At the time it first appeared, I wasn’t able to obtain a copy and I’m rather pleased that I was able to now.

One of the questions that needs to be asked is not what do you want, but what do you desire? Some secrets are painful in that way, they are hard to accept and even harder to see one’s way clear. If it is possible to have what you want, does your past allow you or does it demand you resist?

It tells the story of:

This year Christmas just got a little hotter.

Deck the halls with all things kinky. Jonas is an incubus with an incurable lust for women, gingerbread, and holiday lights. He needs one more soul to meet his quota. Amid the baubles and frivolity of the Winter Carnival, he meets Holly Pendleton—a woman with emerald green eyes and a body built for sin—and marks her as the final soul to end his contract. But now Jonas faces a heart-wrenching decision: take what he needs to feed his hunger, or sacrifice himself for the woman who has lit his own demonic soul on fire. Tied up with red ribbons, Holly just might be Jonas’s deepest Christmas wish and the one woman who could set him free.

Holly Pendleton is still recovering from the death of her husband and Dom. The holidays are especially lonely until a dark stranger walks in the door to Harlowe’s Bookery and Christmas Shoppe. The man’s enigmatic gaze holds her and ignites her body and her mind. When Holly accepts a job to decorate the sexy client’s apartment, she unknowingly steps into an age-old battle between the forces of darkness. Jonas Corsair is a man who makes her blood run hot and her dreams even hotter. But will she survive his hold on her soul?

Jonas is coming to the end of his agreement which means, soon, with one more soul, he will no longer be an Incubus. It is Christmas, a time of the year that he loves above all else and it seems fitting that he will find the conclusion to his journey one way or the other. A chance encounter with Holly offers him what he needs, but at the same time it offers what he’s always desired. For Holly, Jonas seemed to be the answer to her prayers, but it may also be more than she ever expected.

The work as a whole is a lovely and cute story about the collision of two souls that have their needs and in finding a connection, things don’t quite go as either of them expected. Jonas, the incubus of the story, isn’t the stereotypical incubus, though it is clear that his past actions are to draw souls to hell. Even so, from the very beginning he’s a different sort of soul, still having some of his innocence in a way and Christmas tends to bring that more out in him to the annoyance of Mallory, a succubus he knows.

Mallory is a minor character, but at the same time she fulfills an important role and while that works, she has a personality that is rather grating at times. While Jonas and Holly are well fleshed out, Mallory is a bit thin and that’s a shame because her personality, when she is present, does tend to overcome all other characters in the scene.

That said, the story itself has some very sad moments, especially around Holly, and those are the moments which define her character and explain a lot of her motivation. She’s suffered greatly, and at the beginning of the work, and at one other point in it, that weighs upon her. This is the thing that bothers me the most about this story. Holly is torn, she’s held by her memories, her needs, and while Jonas is an incubus, and there is some hint of he using his powers to attract Holly, I didn’t think it felt right. By that I mean Holly moves so quickly from grieving to accepting Jonas, and in a very personally important manner, that it doesn’t quite ring true. Those that know a deep, soulful D/s relationship will understand what I mean by that.

The erotica doesn’t overpower the story and that’s important because there are several plots that run throughout the work. There’s a good balance between the erotica and the storytelling, the two merge well together when they are intended to. But there’s a lot of background in all of the characters that is only hinted at and never really is played out well. Mallory is a vague character for the most part, save her personality. Jonas talks about how he became an incubus, but there are no details. Holly remembers her tragedy, but doesn’t tell much about it. There are just little whispers of the overall idea, but nothing in specific and that I think took a lot from the story at one important point.

The climax of the work is rather unexpected, adding another dimension to the events of the story, of Jonas’ and Holly’s past. But it happens so quickly, the solution to Jonas’ problem coming in the blink of an eye that it just felt too rushed by far. I would have liked fewer characters in that moment than there are because there just seemed to be too much going on.

The ending is a lovely hot flash of erotica with a BDSM theme that I thought worked well as it did earlier in the story. The ending closes on a warm and heartfelt note and made the story come together well. But at the same time I felt as if there was something missing, something left unexplained and I missed that in the ending. The story of what one’s heart needs to be whole is a complex thing. Telling that story a little more I think would have made the story more emotionally powerful than it is.

Three and a half out of five pitchforks.

I think the one thing missing in this work was telling more about the past of Holly, Jonas, Mallory and all of the other characters. There’s just enough to give them some substance, some meaning, but the real questions about them are set aside for moving onto the encounter, the erotica, and the aftermath. I wish that more time had been spent with Holly coming to terms with her past because that I think would have made the conclusion so much more satisfying than it turned out to be.

 

Tera

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