It’s been some time since a work has appeared in the My Best Friend is a Succubus series by Amanda Clover. I reviewed the first two works in the series in 2016, and you can find them here and here on the Tale and while the series had promise, there were a lot of little things that bothered me, and they really shouldn’t have.
The third work in the series recently was published and so I’ll be reviewing that work today on the Tale. My hope for the third work came to, for the most part, hoping that there would be a lot more story told about Morgana, her world and what exactly is going on overall plot wise. Beyond that, seeing some needed character development would be a good thing as well. But most of all, I hoped that the relationship between Faith and Morgana would grow.
- Title: My Best Friend is a Succubus: Book Three: Embrace of Evil
- Author: Amanda Clover
- Length: 50 Pages
- ASIN: B06XD493KC
- Publishing Date: March 1, 2017
- This work in Kindle Format at Amazon.com
The work tells the story of:
Faith’s boring life has been turned upside down!
Faith Granger’s best friend is a soul-sucking demoness named Morgana. Unfortunately, Morgana has been captured by a group of religious creeps called the Holy Inquisition intent on destroying all demons and recovering the magic codex Faith used to summon the succubus.
When in doubt, double down! Faith recruits her friends and decides to summon another demon so she can rescue Morgana. It’s worth the risk, reasons the budding sorceress, because her feelings for the succubus may run a little deeper than friendship.
Will Faith rescue her ravishing bestie from the Inquisition? Will love blossom between unwitting sorceress and sexy demoness?
Faith’s problems just seem to be getting worse all the time. Morgana’s life is in danger and there’s very few places for her to turn. Seeing no other choice, Faith tells all to her friends and together they are going to try to save Morgana. But there are others watching and in making a fateful choice, Faith might well doom the world.
This work follows on immediately after the events in the prior story, and that takes Faith towards making a series of choices that, like most of them she’s made so far, have unintended consequences. There’s a bit more character development, the plot is a little more involved as well. Overall, that did add something to both Faith and Morgana’s characters, but it also left behind some points which didn’t seem to make a lot of sense with the prior works in the series.
Like the other works, there is a scattered mix of erotica which really didn’t have a lot of heat overall. The climatic scene between Morgana and Faith felt rushed, uninteresting and left a lot of needed development of their relationship abandoned for the sake of introducing a new character to the series.
While Morgana is the main succubus of the series, a new succubus, called Ashara appears and with her comes yet another threat upon the many that are surrounding Faith. It really feels like there’s too many things going on which means there’s not enough time spent in drawing some of the plots towards their climax in this story. Ashara is a bit stereotypical as a Succubus, and while there is some of her history told, it’s murky, confused and rushed.
Perhaps that is the single problem in this part of the series. Everything seems to be rushed and it didn’t need to be. The story moves from place to place, moment to moment, and there’s not a lot of time allowed outside of the scattered moments of erotica for the characters to develop. Along with this comes a vast number of spelling, grammar, point-of-view and tense errors that tripped me up over and over again throughout the story. At one point the story went from being told from Faith’s perspective to suddenly reading as if it was a choose-your-own adventure book and that didn’t make any sense at all.
This work reads very much as being the weakest of the series so fat and I really wish it wasn’t. Slowing down the story would have helped, certainly another editing pass would have been a good idea. Finding heat in the erotica would be good as well. Most of all, the strangeness of some of the dialogue and the way Faith’s friends deal with her revelations, just confused things a lot more than needed to be. All that said, I like where the story is going, but there’s a lack of care and that disappointed me.
Two and a half out of five pitchforks.
The work needs a serious editing for the number of errors that appear at least. Beyond that, the story needs to slow down some, find the heat in the erotica and make Faith’s relationships matter more than they do. I hope the next work will focus more on Faith discovering more about her past, Morgana figuring herself out as well. The threats they both face aren’t going to be simple things to solve, I hope, but in that also needs to be the story to support things. Too many plots left dangling, too many characters left lost. Some focus needs to come and hopefully it will.