One of the themes that I personally do not enjoy is when there is a mix of horror and abuse that is mixed up with what otherwise could be some lovely erotica. Reading about a character being abused in all sorts of ways for me isn’t all that erotic. While this can have its place within a work, it takes away a lot of story building, heat, and in many ways, seems to serve very little purpose.
This is, of course, just my own personal view, but if the point of the story is, in some sense, the revealing of truth between the main characters, does there really need to be an evil succubus involved to make that happen in the first place? Somehow that doesn’t work well for me.
- Title: Slumber Party Succubus
- Author: Sakura von Sternberg
- Length: 69 Pages
- ASIN: B017Z9NREO
- Publishing Date: November 13, 2015
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The work tells the story of:
Alexa and Isabelle have an annual tradition that has continued since the early days of their friendship: an all-night slumber party filled with junk food, box wine, and bad horror movies. Even as adults, the two continue their slumber parties with pride… but now things have become a little more complicated. Alexa, a trans girl with a love for high fashion and eighties slasher movies, harbors a long-unrequited crush on Isabelle, a cis girl. She doesn’t want to say anything or act on those impulses. They’ve been friends for a long time. The last thing Alexa wants to do is wreck their friendship. But she’s having a hard time keeping this a secret.
But that’s not all. Somehow, Alexa and Isabelle have summoned an ancient succubi—a sexually insatiable phallogyne—to their party. She comes to them looking for erotic pleasure… and quite possibly takes more from them than either could imagine.
Alexa and Isabella are brought to her as sacrificial lambs… but will leave dumbstruck, sexually fulfilled, and changed forever. They will experience pleasures beyond the limits of human imagination… and ecstasy that can only come to those who are already damned!
Alexa has a secret, but for that matter so does Isabelle. Friends for so long, Isabelle helping Alexa to make her way through her transition and her new life. They share a tradition, watching frightfully bad horror movies, but a dream remembered draws them both into the clutches of a succubus who has designs for both of them.
I found this work ebbed and flowed a lot for me. The beginning of the work, where Alexa and Isabelle’s story is told I enjoyed quite a lot. It told of their lives, what they had been through. It offered a glimpse into Alexa’s secret, her fears and more. All of this laid the most interesting groundwork for the story and in doing so I wondered how things were going to transpire.
But from the first moment of the pair falling into the clutches of Ardat-Lile, the succubus of the work, there are a lot of questions about how that happened exactly. There is mention made of a dream shared, but with so little detail as to be really of no use to understanding what is going on. Beyond that, when they have entered Ardat-Lile’s lair, the story seems to move from the character and their stories to Ardat-Lile quite simply having her way with both of them. There’s very little time spent when the sex begins to tell a story.
The erotica the follows I found to be somewhat violent, without purpose and, as well. didn’t add anything to the plot or work as a whole. It felt very much like a means to force the two main characters into submission, and the erotica kept hammering at that point over and over again.
Ardat-Lile herself is, as a whole, a rather stereotypical succubus in that she seems to really care only about sex and domination over her “girl-sluts” which I think tells very much about what the erotic scenes are like. The control she puts over Alexa and Isabelle is brutal and whatever heat might have been in the story kept being washed away by the description of all of the suffering that both characters were going through.
It is a harsh comparison between the beginning of the story, which is loving and tells of a relationship that just needs a little push to move onwards into a story of succubus domination using pain. As such, the story really didn’t connect with me well once that corner was turned. There seemed to be no real purpose to Ardat-Lile’s actions, no meaning behind them, nothing that told of why things happened as they did.
At the conclusion of the story, there is a twist, but it is one that really isn’t a surprise considering how often Ardat-Lile tells Alexa she wants her. It is a bit shocking, what the ending gives, but it doesn’t really end the work on a satisfying note. From the depths of abuse and domination to where the story ends there’s a disconnect that bothered me.
Overall, there was just something missing in the latter part of the work and as such it made for a difficult read. Moments of suffering and abuse are not exactly erotic, nor are they exactly horrific as well. There needed to be something to bridge the gap, to tell more of a story than simply reading about all of the different ways that Ardat-Lile dominated.
Two and a half out of five pitchforks.
Ardat-Lile is such a terribly disappointing succubus in so many ways and given how the story started I had hoped she wouldn’t be. The twist in the story comes as being expected, all things considered as well. Reading about two characters being made to suffer does not read as erotic well. It doesn’t quite manage to be horror either. So the work just seems to languish its way from moment to moment without direction and purpose, other than to link some short erotic moments together. There’s heart missing in this work, I wish it had been there to enjoy.