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Jan 31 2016

A Review of Slut Finder: Level 10: The Demon by Sasha Scott

Slut Finder: Level 10: The Demon by Sasha Scott

Slut Finder: Level 10: The Demon by Sasha Scott

For the past few months there has been an ongoing erotica series published called App Warp by Sasha Scott in which the main character found himself in possession of a certain piece of software that gave him a measure of mind control over the women he encountered. I never read the series as it didn’t appeal to me. However, what appears to be the final work in the series does have succubi appearing.

Sometimes there is a concept which makes a good deal of sense, explains a lot, and in the end leaves some really interesting plots open to be explored. However, when the characters cannot grow out of being stereotypical, whether that is being “evil” or just looking for “Miss Right For The Moment” then the story tends to fall flat and just become a porn movie scene and nothing more.

  • Title: Slut Finder: Level 10: The Demon
  • Author: Sasha Scott
  • Length: 22 Pages
  • ASIN: B01B3OI3HS
  • Publishing Date: January 25, 2016
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work is the story of:

Slut Finder is a powerful app given only to the most worthy of men. With it they can find the most compatible sexual partners imaginable and thanks to the built in hypnosis feature there is no way for them to resist.

It’s the final level of Slut Finder and a change in pace. The true secret about the app is revealed when a succubus appears from the phone, hungry for all that lustful energy which had been built up using the app. Will the demon succeed or will they also be conquered?

A series of encounters using an app called Slut Finder climaxes with the revelation of who created the app, what it really is designed to do. Eventually someone has to pay, somehow, and using the app comes with a price.

Tha main character himself is shallow, singularly minded, and is lacking as characters go. Even when there could well be some kind of character development, that’s pushed to the side for getting to the erotica. Reading his thoughts is a bit painful as well because they are simply awkward and don’t “read” well which hurts the telling of the story.

The single named succubus in this work, Hebe, overall is a rather stereotypically written character in that she’s evil, really only wants to “take care” of the main character. As with the main character of the work, there’s really nothing to like about her either. She’s shallow, self-absorbed and just reads very much as being one-dimensional.

Which brings me to the writing itself. There are some points where the dialog “sounds” wrong, the thoughts of both characters having the oddest turn of phrase, a tone that just doesn’t seem right all things considered. The thoughts of the main character, the narrative, becomes stale and uninteresting very quickly. There’s really no heat in the erotica to be found.

There isn’t much heat because this is really, for all intents and purposes, a scene from a porn movie, written out. There’s no depth, all that Hebe cares about is sex, and the main character really isn’t that much different as a whole. Once the mind control slash succubus sex scene comes to a close things take a twist.

That twist is never explained, which bothers me. There’s no good reason for why things turn out as they do. More so, the actual conclusion of the story doesn’t make a lot of sense either, being an afterthought, something to just say who won, but not why.

This work reads as porn, not erotica. That is a real problem because the story gets lost in the drive to get to Hebe and the main character jumping into bed together and telling that scene. There’s so very little time spent explaining what the app is, who Hebe is, and in the end that’s not really told well.

I would have liked more story than this work gives. There’s too much focus on the sex and not enough on the story itself. I think the work needs another editing pass just to make the dialog sound less like a porn movie and more like real characters, not to mention making the narrative read more like a story than a series of disjointed sentences that become tedious to read.

Two out of five pitchforks.

The concept of the phone app I think was a good idea and it offered a hint that the succubi might be a bit more than simply looking for some souls and some sex. Sadly that didn’t happen, the story didn’t change from how the rest of the series unfolded and why the series ended as it did was never really explained well.

Having gone back and skimmed over the rest of the series, my thoughts about this work really were reinforced, that being this was more “porn” than “erotica” as a whole. It’s a shame that turned out to be true because the concept, the mind control aspects and the appearance of succubi had promise, in the end. But in the end, that didn’t come.

 

Tera

3 comments

  1. avatar
    pocong

    I have a very deep distaste for this kind of wasted potential. The idea of an online app created by demons is a great story idea and it’s one that I’ve seen executed fantastically before. One of my favorite game series, Shin Megami Tensei, is built on the premise. That’s what hurts me the most, seeing SMT use the premise to build complex worlds shaped by beings like succubi and dealing with the ramifications of that tech being widespread and then coming to this and seeing it used as badly written porn. Welp. Maybe next time.

  2. avatar
    James

    Actually, this idea of an app reminds me of the “Master PC” series of stories in the EMCSA . . . so it isn’t even entirely original.

    As for the writing, once we have established (in the synopsis), that there is a succubus in the story, why can’t the author use the correct pronoun: she? Plural pronouns are never appropriate for singular nouns.

  3. avatar
    TeraS

    I think that “Master PC” has inspired a lot of stories overall. I can look on Amazon and see… 25 books which have that sort of theme…

    That said, I have the thought of something a bit more… interesting… app wise…

    Tera

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