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Nov 13 2015

A Review of Succubus 2.0: And Other Femdom Mind-Control Short Shorts by Declan Heyse

Succubus 2.0: And Other Femdom Mind-Control Short Shorts by Declan Heyse

Succubus 2.0: And Other Femdom Mind-Control Short Shorts by Declan Heyse

A review this time of a collection of short stories that have, in some ways, connections between them and as well at the same time a bit of a disconnect as well. While the subject matter deals with some of my own personal interests, it leaves something to be desired in the reading however.

Not all things called Succubi are, of course, Succubi as we know them… Sometimes they are the things that we have within ourselves that reflect needs, wants and desires… and the price to be paid for them…

The story tells of:

A forgotten marriage. A mind for the taking. A pleasurebot that brings about the fall of civilization. Fifteen short-short tales of femdom mind control and hypnosis.

This work is a collection of very short flashes, some of them being only a few lines in length, occasionally a page, sometimes a bit more than that. The main themes are clearly mind control and femdom themes and as the story goes on there is also a fleeting connection to each of the works.

This connection gives a semblance of a complete story, but at the same time there needs to be more revealed in that story than there is. The work feels like each passage is a summary of a longer work, a teaser if you will, and as such leaves a desire to see that complete story which is hidden among the words here.

Emotionally the work is very well written, offers much to consider and tells of many of the fantasies that are seen in much of the mind control and femdom stories. But again, the work is short, leaving much unsaid and that is somewhat disappointing.

There is but a single reference to Succubi in this work and this story tells of manufactured fantasy and what it did to the world… and what it might still do if the moment came to be. The work, called Succubus 2.0, is intriguing and makes me wonder about what that particular larger story might be. Again, the fleeting glimpse in this work of the larger story mainly teases a summary of what that story could be and leaves the rest to the imagination of the reader.

As a whole, the same can be said for the entire collection. There is just enough story to capture one’s interest, but then nothing more comes from that. In truth the author should consider taking each of these short summaries and transform them into longer, more involved stories.

There’s a lot to like here, and it really all should be told to the fullest…

Three and a half out of five pitchforks.

Quite an interesting collection of little vignettes that I thought worked together well as a whole. Not really a work about Succubi per se, but the mind control aspects are quite clear. I would have liked to see the story that comes between the vignettes as I think that would have been an interesting read.

 

Tera

2 comments

  1. avatar
    James

    They sound like brilliant, inspired ideas, but genius really is 10% inspiration and 90% perspiration. To sell the 10% without doing the work of the 90% seems to be a bit of a cheat.

  2. avatar
    TeraS

    The balance would have been nice to see…

    Tera

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