Sometimes I shake my head when I read the titles of some published works. The title is obviously meant to garner attention, to be titillating, to draw attention. Then, generally, the book summary is so far over the top to be almost laughably so. Sometimes all that does is reinforce that the work itself isn’t much and one shouldn’t expect much from it.
The problem is, however, when the actual writing, story, heat and characters are so much better and deserve a better title and book summary to give the work a chance to succeed. That can make a huge difference and it is one that should be. Because.
- Title: Muff Diving Massage
- Author: Katz O’Connor
- Length: 26 Pages
- ASIN: B00PYEPGZ6
- Publishing Date: November 20, 2014
- This work at Amazon.com
The work tells of:
A mysterious, otherworldly lesbian massage parlour that redefines happy endings! Perky birthday girl Amy is as straight as they come, and ecstatic after her boyfriend surprises her with a ticket to the mysterious new massage parlour with a secret. However, Amy soon finds herself slowly succumbing her stripped, oiled body on the massage table to a persuasive, hit lesbian masseuse with a wicked tongue! With the tables turned on Amy, when this raw, raunchy happy ending comes, she might leave with new priorities – and a boyfriend who’ll just have to go!
Amy gets a gift from her boyfriend for a spa visit. She finds her way there and discovers that the spa isn’t what she expected it to be. And after the Madame and the Masseuse finish with Amy, she’s not the Amy that she was before.
The story is a bit unclear on what the two women that Amy encounters are exactly. Considering that their names are Lucy and Lily, and what Lucy does to Amy, it is entirely possible that they are Succubi, but that really isn’t touched on very much in the story. They are both very sexual in nature and poise, which comes out really well in the story, but overtly there is no sign of tails or horns or other things that really prove this to be true.
The story is, as a whole, a hot flash with a good deal of story to tell and I feel that worked quite well. The story leading up to Amy’s encounter is very well done and I liked that part of the work very much. The heat in the hot flash is very good with a bit of what seems to be mind control erotica mixed into things, and it is that subtle mind control that, for me, makes Lucy very much a Succubus and that is true of Lily as well.
The work is very well written and I enjoyed the story as a whole up until the climax of the work and most of the aftermath where questions are asked and Amy’s view of the universe is changed and she is as well in many ways. Where things fall apart for me is the last page of the story which really makes no sense and doesn’t really add anything to the story. The ending feels wrong, goes off on a tangent and as such just hurts what otherwise is a well told and hot story.
That shouldn’t have been and really if the story ended in the moment when Amy’s views of herself and her world just start to change that would have been perfect. But the story goes that little bit too much further and it shows.
I’d like to see more about this universe however, not so much Amy but rather Lily and Lucy if for no other reason than to define who they are, what they are, and what their relationship is. I think that would be a really good series in many ways.
Three out of five pitchforks.
Get rid of the title and the summary. This isn’t an adult movie, there is a lot more to this work than that and that is what should be the emphasis. The story stands on its own, it works well, and it is a lovely, passionate hot flash. But there is much that takes away from that before the first word is read and that shouldn’t happen.