There are, as a whole, quite a number of very short pieces of erotica, some of which involve Succubi, that are popping up on Amazon. Many times there is little plot, little character development, and, as a whole, the entire focus of the work is the erotica.
Occasionally, there is the barest glimmer of an attempt at something better than that, which generally turns out to be a twist or two in the story. While that can, sometimes, make a difference, getting to the point where there is more to the story than a stereotypical story of someone having their way with a succubus can be a difficult thing to get through.
- Title: Troll Meat For The Sleeping Succubus
- Author: R. Woodrose
- Length: 12 Pages
- ASIN: B0100KHNYA
- Publishing Date: June 18, 2015
- This work at Amazon.com
The story is about:
When a summoner attempts to conjure an otherworldly servant to help him prepare for a village festival, he is pleasantly surprised to find he made a serious mistake. Instead of summoning a helpful harvest spirit, he conjures an insatiable succubus named the Sleeping One, who can only be awoken by the pure sexual energy of the most masculine men.
The summoner one-ups that little requirement by transforming himself into a masculine troll.
Aurilorn goes about summoning a servant to make alcohol for a festival. A small error causes a succubus to appear instead and then things get a little out of hand in more ways that he expected.
As a whole the story is silly, has a very flimsy reason for the summoning, becomes sillier still when Aurilorn realizes he has a succubus with him. Beyond that, what he can get from the succubus in the way of mending his current problem was just… wrong.
The succubus, who’s name is never said, save for being “The Sleeping One” acts for the most part as a sex object and not much more than that. For much of the story, she is almost catatonic, reflecting her “name” and it takes quite a lot before she speaks, acts, or even really becomes engaged in the story. Really there’s no hint of her personality, what she is capable of, or anything else until the very last few pages of the work when there is a twist and her character is revealed. Sadly, it is rather stereotypical, and in that I was disappointed.
Aurilorn transforms himself into a… troll… at one point which then leads towards the heat of the work. That really is very over the top, reads very much like a scene from a porn movie and in being so just didn’t have a lot of heat for me in it. Aurilorn wasn’t interesting to me. in personality or purpose, and throughout the story I kept wondering why he would summon a spirit when he would have been just as well to use his knowledge to… brew some beer?
The characters are thin, the story is fleeting, and the twist in the end really isn’t unexpected as well. There could have been more to this, and really the ending points to that idea, but the work closes long before the story moves into something that could have been very interesting.
I’ll give this work two pitchforks out of five.
As a whole, a silly story with questionable erotic moments, a main character who just really seems out of his depth, and a reason for the story that just gives me the oddest smile. It’s just a shame that there wasn’t more story in the place of the questionable erotica.