There are a lot of things I can overlook when it comes to enjoying a story about Succubi. I can overlook a lot of omissions and mistakes. I can deal with plot problems and more if, and only if, the story holds my attention and turns out to be better then I thought it could be.
The thing I cannot overlook is when a story is told that has heat, a story, characters that are interesting and meets many of the things I look for to give a five pitchfork review, but then are washed out in the last five pages because the story falls into the stereotypical trap with Succubus characters.
- Title: Summoning the Succubus
- Author: Helen Atreya
- Length: 81 Pages
- ASIN: B00NIYXL9W
- Publishing Date: September 11, 2014
- This work at Amazon.com
The summary tells of:
Summoning a succubus is an exciting but dangerous spell! Use it to impress your friends or torment your enemies!
With the right ingredients and the proper preparation you can create a magic circle that will hold her indefinitely and bind her power to your will. When properly controlled, a succubus makes a dangerous decoration for your evil lair, or you can spend the magic of the circle extracting a wish from her!
But be warned: succubi are tricky and difficult to control!
Do not, under any circumstances, do what she asks of you. And definitely do not enter the circle once it’s complete! Only doom will come from that.
Jill finds a very old book that tempts her to summon a Succubus for herself. Deciding that she needs to do so, she gathers up the things she needs, performs the act, and summons Anya, a blue futanari Succubus. Anya knows what Jill wants and tempts her, gives her what she wants, then then Anya makes Jill pay the price.
Overall, I really liked the story, which starts at the beginning when the book is created and then leads to the current day where Jill finds it. I thought the story was interesting from the first page, the characters that appeared and how the story worked as a whole.
Jill was really well written and I liked how her story was told. She has a past, a rather complex present and when she comes into contact with the book, what happens to her, how her focus changes, makes for a lot of character development.
For the most part of the story, and I will get back to this, I thought that Anya was quite a good succubus in a lot of ways. She’s powerful, seductive and manipulative and as the story progresses it’s clear that she gets the better of Jill over time. There are hints of not telling the whole truth, of “pushing” things to happen for her benefit and all of that makes her interesting. There’s even the impression of her actually caring about Jill in some way which I thought would lead her to not being stereotypical. And I held that belief in the story up until the very last five pages.
Up until then the story had wonderful heat, passion, and the scenes themselves were really well told and the erotica was every good. It wasn’t quite over the top in what happened, and Anya being a futa added some twists to things that worked well and I liked them for how they were used and the story turned in several places.
There is a hint of mind control in the story as well that worked nicely, there’s a bit of dominance as well which also turned the heat up too. Really there wasn’t anything that I didn’t like in the story right up until the climax of the work and the truth was revealed.
That truth being that Anya, in spite of all of what happened in the work, was just a stereotypically evil succubus with one thought on her mind. That really was disappointing for me and it took away all of the heat and just about everything that I enjoyed in the work. I do understand why shock endings are popular, but I don’t think it needed to turn out as it did here.
I could see Anya using mind control on Jill to make her a slave or servant. I could see Anya and Jill becoming a couple, Jill teaching Anya about the world she entered. I could see Anya and Jill falling in love, possibly Jill becoming a non-futa Succubus mate to Anya. All of these endings I would have been fine with and any of them would have made this work a solid five pitchfork read.
What happens instead is that the author takes the well travelled path with Succubi and just takes out all the heat from the story within one single page. That turned me off and when the story was done i just sighed and put the book aside to think about how I felt about it. What I couldn’t get past in my thoughts was why the author needed to go in the direction they did at the end. It put a damper on the heat, it added a lot of sadness in the story and it… just didn’t feel right.
I know that all stories don’t come with a happy ending, but in this case the ending that appears is just about the worst one possible. In all seriousness, Anya had mind controlled Jill so far that there really wasn’t any reason for Anya not to bend Jill to her will completely. That could have ended the work on a very hot moment and everything else that happened in the last five pages still could have been there and added to the heat instead of taking away from it.
It’s a shame because save for that last five pages it is a wonderful work of Succubus erotica. But I can’t find my way to getting past the ending because that’s the point of the work… and I just don’t care for how it ended.
Three out of five pitchforks.
The ending simply ruined all of the enjoyment I found in the work. I could think of several ways this work could have ended where it was hot, where it wasn’t stereotypical, and leave me wanting another work to tell more about Anya and Jill. Where this one ends does not leave me with anything save the ashes of a stereotypical Succubus being evil because she is.