Transformation stories, as a whole, interest me in that the actual change, if it is done well, can be very erotic on its own. One of the themes that does come from time to time, and I have written a story in this theme at least once, is a Succubus or Incubus transforming the one that summoned them into a bimbo or similar plaything.
However the transformation of a character into what is basically a Succubus Bimbo isn’t something that happens often.
- Title: The Demon’s Plaything
- Author: Alexi Remington
- Length: 11 Pages
- ASIN: B00JQUN9M6
- Publishing Date: April 16, 2014
- This work at Amazon.com
It tells the story of:
Tara is a plain looking witch who desires beauty – but when she summons a demon to fulfil her wish, she gets more than she bargained for!
Tara is learning to be a witch, but then finds that another witch is making moves on someone she wants. Of course that means Tara needs to be at least as sexy as the other witch and decides to make a deal with the devil. Only thing is that she summons an Incubus and he changes Tara into what he thinks she should be.
As a whole the Incubus in this story was… stereotypical. There really wasn’t any character, his purpose was to turn Tara into a plaything, and as such really there isn’t much more to say about him. He’s very dominant, lords over Tara, and uses some mind control and body changes to make her do whatever he wants.
That is really the core of the story, the sexual encounter between the two of them, Tara slowly slipping away from who she was into something and someone else. The erotica is a bit more brutal and nasty than I personally like, though some may enjoy it for what it is.
The better parts of the work were in the lead up to the actual summoning where there was a bit of story and background told which set up the why of the story. The other part was the end of the work when the transformed Tara appears to confront her witch sister.
But then the story comes to an abrupt ending at the point where the results of what the Incubus did to Tara are beginning to be shown. I found that disappointing in that there were a couple of paths the story could have taken and it would have been interesting to see. The Incubus could have another motive for what he did to Tara and I would have liked to see that.
One or two minor spelling mistakes consisting of a letter missing from a word but otherwise the writing was as a whole a medium heat level hot flash for me personally. The erotica was a little to violent and, for lack of a better word, demanding and that didn’t do much of anything for me.
I think the author would have been well served to give this story about five more pages to tie up the loose ends, or at least give a better taste of Tara’s changes and what that does to the others around her. It just felt incomplete and that took away from the work.
I’ll give this work two and a half pitchforks out of five.
Some heat, a story that made sense as the background to why everything happened, but the actual erotica as a whole wasn’t quite what it could have been. And bringing the story to a close when the aftermath was about to begin was disappointing on its own.