Dec 02 2014

A Review of Taken By The Succubus by Della July

Taken By The Succubus by Della July

Taken By The Succubus by Della July

Sometimes there are books that give me pause when I read them. It’s not normally the themes or the characters that do, the problem comes when the story feels… off.

Trying to understand why that is, at least for me, is important because I want to enjoy the stories I read and not wonder after all is said and done what exactly happened within them. But sometimes I can’t work out the reason and it bothers me.

  • Title: Taken By The Succubus
  • Author: Della July
  • Publishing Date: August 27, 2012
  • Length: 3,300 Words
  • ASIN: B00938E0K6
  • This work at Amazon.com

The story tells of:

When Joey rubs an old Aladdin’s like lamp he doesn’t expect a creature living inside to show up and turn upside down his viewpoint on his dream orgasm. But then he realizes that something important is missing in this great sex recipe…

Joey uses a lamp from a friend that promises to give him what he desires, his fondest wish to be with someone he wishes to be with. That dream comes true, but not exactly how Joey thought it would be in many ways. And in that dream, he learns a lesson about reality that he should have known in the first place.

This is an odd work in a lot of ways to me at least. The main one has to do with the way the Succubus in the story, if she is one mind you, acts and speaks. It seems off somehow in the course of the story in tone or words or both at times and that jarred me from the story many times. I didn’t have a problem with the themes, or the actions, or even what happened to Joey as a result of his desires and the trickery of the Succubus.

My problem is that the writing seemed uneven moving from well written passages into hard abrupt moments in the story that felt wrong. It is most likely my personal preferences speaking, but there was just no… soul… in the characters for the most part I felt until the last few pages where the climax was.

The Succubus herself was very two dimensional and quite stereotypical for the most part. Joey was not much better as well and while I can chalk that up to this work being a short hot flash it doesn’t make for a work that I could really enjoy as a whole.

I should say, quite clearly, that I didn’t have a problem with the themes of gender swapping in this story nor did I have a problem with the sex scene overall. Where my problem comes in is in the cardboard emotions and dialogue within the work. I wanted to have just a little bit of character growth along with erotica and, to me at least, there was very little of that to be seen until there was almost nothing left to read.

As a hot flash, this work could have been better than it was if there was something more given to Joey’s personality from the beginning and not just what happens at the end. Lessons learned need to come throughout a story and not as a bolt of lightning out of the blue.

Two pitchforks out of five.

A hot flash that was missing something. I’m still not sure what that is exactly, but in having it not there hurt the story and that bothers me…




  1. avatar

    A story can be a flash; it can be a quick sketch; but, when the characters are not treated as if they are important, the story just won’t work, no matter what happens.

  2. avatar

    Aww… that’s a bit disappointing. The idea of a succubus granting wishes for someone has a lot of potential so I’m sad to see that it floundered so badly. I was hoping to see some fun misadventures as she put a sexy twist on all of his wishes but I guess it just wasn’t meant to be.

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    Not the easiest of things by far…


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