There are, of course, many different myths around the idea of Succubi. There is, of course, the general view that they are female in nature. Another concept is that they can switch between genders. Still another concept is where a Succubus character appears that combines genders into one being. In all of these cases what matters to me most of all is how they are presented as characters, and what the author does with them.
What matters is how that Succubus is connected to the other characters in the story and what happens in the story. Having a reason for the story is much more important then then erotica within it, not because of it…
- Title: Succubus
- Author: Lucas Grindhouse
- Length: 17 Pages
- ISBN: 9780991702527
- Publishing Date: April 29, 2013
- This work at Smashwords.com
The story is of:
This short story is a twist on the tale of the succubus. There is a way to stop the demon from gaining title to his soul. Will Richard find it in time? Frightened and unsure how to proceed, he calls Professor Stein. She is more than willing to help but knows little more than he does.
They struggle to find an answer and a close bond develops. Prepare yourself for a wild ride as the twosome try their best to find a solution in time to save Richard from the demon.
The Succubus in this story is unique in that while they appear to be female, there is a rather obvious difference to them. They have male sexual organs and with that difference also comes a rather severe and brutal dominant streak. There is also some obvious mind control that happens through the story along with some magical manipulation of both of the other characters in the story.
For the most part, the Succubus is a means to an end in the story, we really never learn anything specifically about her. Her name is never said for one thing and for the other there are questions about her that I would have liked to been touched on, but were not for the sex scenes and domination that occurs.
But, she is a means to drive the story forwards and that brings up the two other characters in the story. Richard and Sarah, when we meet them, are rather two dimensional at first, but over the course of the story they develop somewhat from thin beginnings. There are moments which difficult to read and then followed by the two reconciling and moving on to find a way out of the problem they face. Overall that plays out well, but sometimes the emotions seem a little bit wooden between them which is a shame.
There is a minor problem with the story and that is the speech of the Succubus seemed… stilted or somewhat odd in the choices of words used. The flow of their speech, and occasionally that of the other characters, seemed to falter when an odd word was used instead of one you might normally expect.
For example: “I will have carnal gratification and you are incapable of avoiding it.” It just… sounds wrong, odd, or off in nature. It may well be part of the Succubus’ nature in this story to speak like this, but it also bleeds into the speech of the other characters at time and it bothered me.
The erotic moments in the story go from somewhat violent in nature between the Succubus and Richard to, if not tender, then very much a mirror in the moments between Sarah and Richard over the course of the story. Not quite a romance between them over the course of the story, but nonetheless it was nice to see the development of both Sarah and Richard’s relationship as things progressed.
The story ends I think a bit too abruptly, the solution is rather quick and pat bringing the story to a close with a little footnote of where it could go in the future. I think it could have used a bit more story between the erotica to paint a more vivid picture, but there is a limiting factor in the story from the beginning and so I can see why that might not be possible.
Three pitchforks out of five.
There is a story here, hinted at, but not quite brought to its full.