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May 25 2014

A Review of The Succubus’ Sub – Session Eight: The Bond Between Them by John Dylena

The Succubus' Sub - Session Eight: The Bond Between Them by John Dylena

The Succubus’ Sub – Session Eight: The Bond Between Them by John Dylena

Today I am continuing my review of the series The Succubus’ Sub, by John Dylena. You can find the review of the first book in the series here. The second book was reviewed here and the third can be found here. The fourth work’s review can be found here with the fifth book’s review here on the Tale and the sixth was reviewed here. The seventh book was reviewed here and today I will be reviewing the eighth work in the series.

One’s past is something that will always define you. Who you are can be seen in those around you whether you like that or not. More importantly, the past can show you something you might have never understood before. The thing to wonder about, when that happens, is what you do about it… and is it really you?

It tells the story of:

Every day after work, Myserra transforms Brett into Brooke and has him clean the condo in his maid outfit. After declining the offer to be a maid full-time, Brett receives a phone call from his mother reminding him of his dad’s birthday. Having lived in the shadow of his parents and brother his whole life, Myserra decides to go with him as his girlfriend Mya.

But when someone at the party spots Brett’s collar, he is pulled aside and questioned about the woman he came with.

The succubus he admits he has feelings for.

They say you can’t go home again. In Brett’s case that’s very true. But with Myserra at his side even the most uncomfortable of places to visit, the home of Brett’s parents and his family, can turn into revelations for them both. And in that comes something Myserra didn’t fully understand either…. but she will.

For me one of the most interesting aspects of this work was getting a glimpse into Brett’s past. It told a lot about him, his feelings, his past, and how he sees himself. More importantly, it also gives Myserra a look into what she has done for Brett as well. Understanding is everything in a relationship, and with a single visit, that becomes much better between the two of them.

Brett’s family is interesting, they have their own quirks and personalities which were very clearly defined from the moment they appear. But it is when Brett compared himself against them, and expresses what bothers him the most, that tells a lot about him. More so when his thoughts about what has happened since he met Myserra come to the fore and there’s a moment in that which, for me, defined the relationship Myserra has with Brett clearly and well enough that it changed Myserra’s character.

There are some truly lovely moments through the work, Brett and Myserra walking up the steps to visit Brett’s parents. Brett taking a phone call while still Brooke and how that goes, especially the reaction from Myserra. Brett finding out something about his family that he didn’t know and how that relates to Myserra. All of this is really wonderful story building and more it adds to the characters of Myserra and Brett in that they have a more revealed backstory which I felt was needed to fill in some gaps about them.

That surprise that is revealed about Brett’s family is something that feels like it will have a huge bearing on the future of the series, much like Heather has had in the past. As well, towards the end of this work there is a moment of introspection that Brett faces that is both heart-breaking and heart warming at the same time. More so, the revelation that Myserra comes to accept ties this work up nicely and where it ends is exactly right for the two of them.

The only thing that bothered me was that the story felt… rushed. It seemed like things were running on rails towards a destination, which was, to be clear, a completely satisfying one for me. But I felt like I needed a little bit of a breather between the reveals and surprises. None of them were immaterial, they all had purpose without a doubt, but a little more padding in the story, a few more funny moments between the seriousness… I think I would have liked that.

Written very well, not a flaw in the writing that I could see in grammar or spelling. Again, all of the characters were written to tell a story, and it gives a turning point for the main characters in the series. Where things go from here? That’s going to be fun to see…

I’ll give this work four pitchforks out of five.

A neat little signpost in this story that turns the series towards something… interesting… as I had hoped it would. The action was a little too quick, and felt rushed which really is the only flaw to what otherwise is a solid work in the series.

 

Tera

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  1. avatar
    James

    Of course it is rushed, Your Majesty: sixteen pages to address all of the variables which would go on with Brett confronting his past, with Myserra walking among Brett’s family and observing the dynamics among them, is simply not enough. Throw in the discovery of the nature of their relationship, as hinted at in the summary, and there is enough that a story four times as long would still be a tiny bit hurried.

    If one is intending to sell ones wares, one should take the time and put in the effort to overcome such difficulty.

  2. avatar
    John Dylena

    @James

    I did not make it short and rushed because of maximizing profit. It came out this way because this chapter in the series was a very difficult one for me write. In fact, I would go on to say that of all eight that are out, this one was the hardest.

    I had trouble piecing it together and I do feel like I failed on delivering a chapter dedicated to the relationship between them.

    The final book in the second volume will make up for the inadequate eighth chapter, and the ninth will make up for the lack of good old fashion sex between the succubus and her sub.

    I just started adapting the first volume into a script for a graphic novel, and should that project take off and I get to this book, I promise to expand and fill in the gaps and make it a whole and satisfying chapter in this series which I love.

  3. avatar
    James

    @ John: I apologize, then, for the connection of brevity to sales. I just see far too much of that in e-stories, and you have been building such a fine series the rest of the time with this.

  4. avatar
    TeraS

    That moment does arrive my heart…

    Tera

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