One of the things that authors need to do, I think at least, is have a summary of their work that catches the interest of others. Another is they should have someone editing their work to pick up on spelling mistakes and other such things.
Those two points are really quite important when one thinks about them. The summary of this work is… lacking to put it mildly. A single sentence isn’t nearly enough. As for the editing? Well, little mistakes that drive me out of a story do bother me.
- Title: Dreams in Red: Part One
- Author: Lilith Li
- Length: 17 Pages
- Format: eBook
- ASIN: B00F75M00Q
- Publishing Date: September 13, 2013
- This work at Amazon.com
The work tells about:
Gwen dreams of a creature with red eyes.
Being that the summary is, in my opinion, lacking, here’s what I think is a better one:
Gwen’s nights are taken by dreams of an Incubus who desires her. His need for her slowly takes over and she cannot escape him even in her waking hours. And when her dreams touch her reality, things… change.
Gwen’s dreams are of being bound and controlled by someone she cannot see. But the touch, the feeling alone are more than enough for her dreams to be very vivid and stay in her mind once she awakens. Her thoughts wander during the day, resulting in some rather embarrassing moments from time to time. But it is her dreams that take hold of her… quite literally.
There is, for lack of a better explanation, an Incubus haunting Gwen, one that seemingly knows what she desires. The moments of the real world pale in comparison to the moments in dreams where Gwen is powerless to resist the Incubus and what it wishes to do to her.
As the story progresses the heat builds until the climax of the story and a discovery that Gwen could have never expected. I hope, truly, that the author continues the story using the characters they placed in this work and not made a new path for the series to follow when, or if, it should ever appear.
There are quite a number of open ended questions by the end of this work, some of which I think might be red herrings, but nonetheless I would like to know whether my thoughts about the work are correct or not. That will require a second, or more, parts to find out.
The thing is that I find the real world moments… boring. By that I mean that while Gwen seems alive in them, the others around her are… cardboard. By that I mean there is the attempt at a connection, but it doesn’t feel right or work right for me at least. The erotic moments are nicely hot and the descriptions are lovely, but there is only so much sex I can deal with before I wonder about having some story again. In this work there is a lot more sex than story. I’d like to see that to be equal or if not equal then at least give the people around Gwen more than they seem to be.
Oddly, the real world seems more like a dream than the dream world is… Perhaps that is a clue? It’s something to think about at least…
I’m giving this work two and a half out of five pitchforks.
Will I read the next work in the series when it comes out? I’m of two minds honestly… I would like to see where the author is going with this story. But I would like more story with my erotica please?