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Aug 16 2013

A Review of Cock Craving Witch by Lauren Stone

Cock Craving Witch by Lauren Stone

Cock Craving Witch by Lauren Stone

It is, really, a given that when you make a deal with a devil… or any of the Succubi or Incubi for that matter… Things never go exactly the way you expect or want them to. There are so many stories that take that idea and twist it and turn it to the point where the one that summoned the evil in question gets… well screwed in many different ways and directions.

Now, it has become somewhat of a trope and as such I have pretty much seen many of the possible ones that involve Succubi and Incubi.

I did find one work that takes that trope and adds a bit of mind control and time travel to the mix to make the story more interesting overall.

The problem is that the author needed and editor to make it all work together and they didn’t seem to find one…

  • Title: Cock Craving Witch
  • Author: Lauren Stone
  • Publishing Date: January 2, 2012
  • Length: 14 Pages
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work is the story of:

Amber is a contemporary witch, intent on helping her best friend solve a sexual problem. Only when Amber summons a demon to help, she gets much more than she expected. The demon is a sexual being who wants nothing more than complete control over the desires of Amber and her friends.

Amber is an eighteen year old witch who just wants to help her friend. Problem is that she isn’t all that well versed in magic, she goes against the advice of her mentor, and in the end messes up everything to the point that really bad things happen. And when you mess up and an Incubus is involved… you really can be screwed in ways that you cannot imagine.

And that is the point where this story does get interesting. The problems she creates for herself, how she tries to solve them, and what that continues to create as problems are interesting to read. That makes for a good story and with that comes the expectation that the things that connect to the main plot, sex or otherwise, will be as interesting..

It should have been, but then the problems I had with the other work from this author that I reviewed last week creep into this one. Lots of spelling, tense, and other writing errors that just made the story as a whole so very hard to get through. It’s hard to enjoy the heat of a story when the spelling or grammar just wrecks anything you are trying to imagine in your mind.

The Incubus of the story, Darren, was rather stereotypical which was a shame to be honest about it. He could have been interesting, but all that really mattered was the sex and the control to him. Otherwise there wasn’t a lot of character there to invest it.

Some warm to hot sex scenes, but again the writing was difficult to get through and that hurt the work overall. It is also very short in length, could have had more in it, and I think if the work was edited and expanded some that it would be, again, a lot more than it is.

One other thing. This work is no longer published on Smashwords where I originally found it, but it is on Amazon currently. I can only hope that the author fixed the errors in the story first before they published on Amazon.

I’ll give this work one and a half pitchforks out of five.

The author needs an editor. Just that alone would make a real difference to this work. Better flow of writing makes a story that could have been, one that was.

 

Tera

3 comments

  1. avatar
    Pocong

    I just wish that the Author had chosen a better name for the story than “Cock Craving Witch”.
    It just seems a bit too on the nose to me. Having to headbutt your way through the dialogue is bad but that title will keep a lot of people from even bothering to try.

  2. avatar
    James

    Oh, but there are others who will buy it simply for the title.

    This is still more proof that art involves craft–effort. No matter how great the artist’s vision, it needs to be put into a form the rest of the world can access.

  3. avatar
    TeraS

    Mebby I should start pondering titles for books like this…

    Tera

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