I do realize that, for the most part, Succubi are seen as being evil. That is, of course, what the legends call them, how they act, and present themselves. To me, that very much is a stereotype for Succubi.
And that’s where I have a problem with a lot of stories about them. It’s not that I have an issue with what they are, but who they are. A Succubus that is evil for the sake of being evil really doesn’t interest me all that much. A Succubus that is not so much seductive as simply cruel bothers me a lot more…
- Title: Succubus and Sinner
- Author: JB Richards
- Publishing Date: June 27, 2012
- ISBN: 9781476250861
- Length: 10 Pages
- This work at Smashwords
It tells the story of:
Kara is a demon of hell, a succubus that changes to become the object of one’s desire, sent to test mortals and their faith. Her next target is Jacob, a man claiming to be strong in his faith, but can she seduce him and have him freely give up his immortal soul?
Kara is a succubus and she finds someone to tempt with her whiles. She transforms herself into what he desires and then the sex begins. I realize that’s a very short comment on the story, but that does cover just about the entire work.
Kara is a Succubus, there is little doubt of that, but she is so very much a stereotypical one. There’s little in the way of seduction to be seen from her, there is actually little sign of her being a Succubus save for her transformation at the beginning and the amazing ability of Jacob to realize that she is a Succubus. Mind you, she gave him enough hints from the moment she sees him.
What follows is really a game of cat and mouse, Kara playing with Jacob the entire time and gloating over her control or temptation, of him while Jacob tries to resist her and loses himself piece by piece as the story continues.
The work is very short, moving from introducing Kara, changing her to tempt Jacob and then, almost immediately, moving into the sex scenes. They really didn’t have all that much heat in them for me, but then I don’t like the sort of domination and humiliation that happens in this work. There is very little seduction and Kara’s method of claiming souls is basically to force herself on others and then, when they are close to orgasm, telling them to try not to.
It just seems like entrapment, but then that’s the point I think overall. But that doesn’t mean that I have to like the story… and to be honest I don’t all that much.
There are a number of mistakes in the story, one of the most jarring ones is referring to Jacob as a “she” at one point and as well the use of words that sound similar to another the writer meant. A bit of proof reading would have been of some help here.
I’m giving this work two out of five pitchforks.
It just didn’t appeal to me very much and i think a lot of that had to do with all of the stereotypes and the focus in sex above story… More story please? I think that would have helped me at least to enjoy it more…