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Dec 30 2012

A Review of How to Summon a Succubus by Roxie Feurouge

Sometimes the core of a story about Succubi isn’t so much the Succubus themselves, but instead the folly of humans that decide to summon them. Especially ones that don’t realize just how foolish they are. This usually results in things taking a turn for the worse. The question is, what is the turn, and how bad could it possibly be?

How to Summon a Succubus by Roxie Feurouge

  • Title: How to Summon a Succubus
  • Author: Roxie Feurouge
  • Publishing Date: May 29, 2012
  • Length: 3,000 Words
  • ASIN: B0087FJIOO
  • This work at Amazon.com

It is the story of:

Meridiana the succubus has been without a victim for 23 years, when suddenly an influx of internet users start using the ritual to summon them. David is a young man in college who finds just such a ritual on the internet- but gets one of his ingredients wrong, and so he is at Meridiana’s mercy. Will he regret summoning a sex demon?

David asks on a website for a method to summon a Succubus and he gets one. The problem is that he doesn’t know all of the traps and pitfalls and Meridiana, the succubus he summons, is more than willing to take advantage of that…

I think the main problem I have with this story was that it was very short and as such it became simply a hot flash or a stroke erotica story. That’s a shame really as the beginning of the story held a lot of promise really, but when it got interesting… it stopped being so for me.

Meridiana’s background story was interesting, and I would have liked to know more about it, but in this case it was setting only and the story moved away from that as quickly as possible. Past that, we watch as Meridiana watches and plans as David does the same and then summons her. Everything after that is sex really with not much else happening.

When Meridiana springs her trap, that is an odd moment, but it makes sense in the story. What happens to David afterwards is a bit brutal and the ending was, really, quite expected to be honest. I thought I would like her at the beginning of the story, but that soon faded away as her personality was all “gloat and be evil” and not a lot else. That’s kind of thin as a character and I have issues with it.

I can see this becoming a series of stories about Meridiana, which would be more interesting I think overall, but the author needs to tighten up their writing some. The work didn’t flow smoothly for one thing, the characters were paper thin for the most part as well. Oddly enough, the minor characters were more interesting than the main ones for the most part.

I have to wonder if the author might have been better served to not end the work with the first meeting of David and Meridiana, but to tell about the week she is there. I think that would have made for a better story, better characters and involved me more in it.

Three pitchforks out of five.

The story didn’t flow well for me, I didn’t care for Meridiana all that much as well. It was short, much too short and really it could have been more than a stroke story…

But it wasn’t.

 

Tera

2 comments

  1. avatar
    M.E. Hydra

    3,000 words seems a little too short. A good succubus needs plenty of time to ‘play’ with her prey.

  2. avatar
    James

    Only too short if Roxie wants to both develop the characters and jill off, or if–Heaven firfend!–she wants to develop a layered, nuanced narrative. It seems these aren’t her concerns here, or, at the very least, that she only wishes to go to the effort of telling the story if she is sure of a paying audience.

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